human heart

Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by agni, Feb 24, 2005.

  1. agni

    agni New Member

    i might not be a poet,no ,might not be one,
    but ,a heart ,there is,in my chest too,
    a heart,a volcano of feelings....
    only words can it find to let out its heat,
    words are not enough,no,not enough at all,
    its a human heart,tied and bound....
  2. deepakatreya

    deepakatreya New Member

    hey agni,
    let me give my honest opnion(again my opnion only) as you had asked for(in order of importance)
    1:whats most imp in a poem is the feel ,that is there in loads in ur poem.
    2:way u convey ur feelings.Again u are pretty good here.i almost feel that ur right here in front of me screaming:)
    3:a poem should also have a rythm and flow.......flow is quiet have to try and add bit of a rythm in ur poem.

    ps:you poem sounds beautiful after the editing you have done
  3. rockin'away

    rockin'away Banned

    great poem:)
  4. nadish

    nadish Active Member

    I'm agreed with Rockin'away's 3 point.
  5. agni

    agni New Member

    thanks guys for the encouragement....keep in touch....bye!
  6. agni

    agni New Member


    thanks guys for the encouragement... cheers to you :beer:
  7. slamdunk

    slamdunk New Member

    good one, agni keep them coming ..keep on posting.
  8. agni

    agni New Member

    thanksssss slam slam slamy.......

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