How Long ???

Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by rickkkyrich, Apr 10, 2010.

  1. rickkkyrich

    rickkkyrich Guest

    How long ???

    How long will i pretend to be wat i'm not
    but this is wat i do... 'coz this is all i got
    How long will i justify to be the way i am
    how i feel its for real but nobody gives a damn
    How long will i have to dream about a dream
    will i have to live forever to gain my self esteem
    How long will i be jus' another face in the crowd
    will there ever be a day of which i can feel proud
    How long will i have to live my life on conditions
    is there any situation which i can call my destination
    How long will i be restricted to live inside this shell
    will i ever break through...will i ever come out of this hell???
     
  2. walk_alone

    walk_alone **~~| An Atheist |~~**

    not impressive .. maybe it would sound better if I hear it like a song.

    Are you writing just 'coz u have to post?

    Sorry I may be rude .. but I will always be honest
     
  3. rickkkyrich

    rickkkyrich Guest

    i'll ignore this comment coz its one of my fav.. and i wrote it long back.. maybe u dint understand feeling behind..
     
  4. walk_alone

    walk_alone **~~| An Atheist |~~**

    Ignore or take, its totally your prerogative.

    As far as feeling behind this poem is concerned I totally understand. It totally potraits
    "your frustration on something that you can do however are unable to".

    As I said, If I hear it as a song it may sound better.

    Ciao
     
  5. horsesmouth

    horsesmouth Active Member

    i think its good.. if not the best, certainly a poetry
    wen ppl r frustrated, they talk like this..
     
  6. allstarsband

    allstarsband New Member

    Hey nyc 1
    Keep posting!~~~~!
     
  7. nandy0894

    nandy0894 New Member

    i completely disagree wid walk alone nd think dat d poem is awesm....it kinda triggers my memories of sm events...nice poem..
     
  8. rickkkyrich

    rickkkyrich Guest

    ^thanks ..
     
  9. benchwarmer

    benchwarmer New Member

    i liked it too, nice poem buddy...
     
  10. rickkkyrich

    rickkkyrich Guest

    ^thanks again dude !!!
     

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