heres something longer than wat i rite... not something i went through! was just really sad wen i rote it... HEART BROKEN Come join me in this ride That I have taken alone, over and over again Help me pull myself together Help me from falling apart I meet people of all kinds and ages All having superiority in common None original nor unique All lost in the race for fame Pulling each other back Hoping to get ahead I am sorry but none of this would help For what they are is fake Busy in impressing others Beautifying themselves from head to toe Painting their faces for a better look Wearing clothes worth some ones life Walking around with pride I see them making me look worse Here I sit In the endless night Looking as horrible as ever Tied my hair in a ponytail Dressed up in a plain white dress Wiping my tears all alone I sit in the corner hoping for “my” man to return To hold me in his arms Not caring about how I look I wait and wait… But there seems no return I cry to God; “why do u do this to me?” From the far end I hear an answer “cause u ain;t pretty enough” I look up and there my man stands Holding an other beautified puppet in his arms They smirk at me And then walk away My heart shattered into pieces That were never to be glued together again! comments highly welcomed
so immaculately expressed frame of mind that the words literally reverberated my head with lively reflections of the actual event of agony..Needless to say something which happens one in a hundres times while i read a poem reps
Is a song better than a pome? -.- Lol, you weren't sad, you were excited with sadness lol.. nice work..reps
I honestly liked the poem...but it is kinda negative,eventhough the girl is doing the right thing i.e being herself...Maybe she won't get the right guy now but she can be sure that the guy she gets will be THE GUY. The moral of the poem is suggesting us to be someone we're not in ordder to get what we want or atleast thats what I figured it means... In brief: Loved the poem,didn't like the moral/conclusion. Reps for an excellent depiction of a sad girl's mind.
@ vini.... wow! thx gurl... ur comments made ma day! thx a LOT for the appriciation! @ zicky... thx man... well i was sad and not excited... guess u didn;t xactly understand the whole feelin... thx though cause the way u understood it made perfect sense... @ i am not neo... thx man... ur comments have just given this poem a completelky differnt feel to it! thx a lot for reading... well dat gurl has to be me in a way... and the fact that i wouldn't get the one i deserve made me sad for a moment! *smiles* thx for reading man...
Well then keep being you and you'll get mr.right instead of mr.right now. Will give you reps later 'coz I had just given them to you for "Power of Knowledge."
i think i know what/ how exactly u must hv felt...all i can say is tht there is a light at the end of the long dark tunnel...nothng is forever...evn this helpless feeling...this too shall pass.... *HUGS*
@ nimisha... thx gurl! haven;t seen u around here since a long time! always appreciate ur comments! :nw:
