granted...

Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by astroguru26, Feb 22, 2006.

  1. astroguru26

    astroguru26 New Member

    yelling on change of my attitude
    every thing...small or noticeable
    what was precious for our togtherness...

    suddenly looked as worthless.
    tears are like melodramatic,
    the smiles are now sarcastic
    the words are like arrows.

    the personality suddenly overlapped by criticism
    the closeness were over bearing..
    the words spoken are less relevant
    non entity...

    we are in love.....
    getting matured and reponsible about our affection
    early colour of our emotions were getting faded..
    we started knowing each other more concretely..

    love has taken the place of being granted...
    between each other..


    rohit
    astroguru26
     
  2. astroguru26

    astroguru26 New Member

    words are misplaced.................i cud have done more better with the theme of getting the feeling of grantedness ...


    rohit
     
  3. CrYpTiC_angel

    CrYpTiC_angel Rebelle!

    "the feeling of grantedness" :confused:

    You mean, being taken for granted?
     
  4. astroguru26

    astroguru26 New Member



    yep what you wanna say is ryt


    rohit
     
  5. Varshita

    Varshita New Member

    Got lost and confused somewhere in between... then had to start reading again. Still couldnt gather much.
    Though i really liked these lines
     
  6. walk_alone

    walk_alone **~~| An Atheist |~~**

    Rohit,
    its gud to read somthing as raw as this.

    try geting your 4th line "suddenly looked as worthless" with first para.then it makes more sense...i dunno what was ur idea though.

    "yelling on change of my attitude
    every thing...small or noticeable
    what was precious for our togtherness...
    suddenly looked as worthless."

    What do u say?

     

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