Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by rechts_234, Apr 29, 2005.

  1. rechts_234

    rechts_234 New Member

    i woke up one evening
    and was walking along
    with my friend on my side
    on the beach sand

    said my friend
    "think of one thing
    you wouldn't wanna lose
    in this life"

    "why? you know it's you", said i
    and she knew that i meant it
    but she went silent
    and held my hand

    i closed my eyes
    to feel the warmth
    but i wouldn't feel any
    it was just the mist of the sea
  2. rocking_devil

    rocking_devil Banned

    what cani sounds like a kiddy story turned poem.
  3. 6string_addict

    6string_addict * Addicted Guitarist * <img src="http://www.indian

    i am really :boxed: ....
  4. rechts_234

    rechts_234 New Member

    i made that up in some 5 minutes ...

    thanks for reading
  5. browneyegurlie

    browneyegurlie Sweet as Honey

    ooo its really sweet in a sense yet impacting
  6. rechts_234

    rechts_234 New Member

    well i atleast got thru to one person ... thanks browneyegurlie
  7. Santhosh Chris

    Santhosh Chris New Member

    WOW Pradeep! Great poem!!! I've read a lot of your previous poems but this one REALLY made me think! What's more amazing is that you wrote this in just under 5 minutes :shock: !! WAY TO GO BRO!!! :rock:

    but really only SOME people can understand it. Hey Rocking_Devil, you say Iron Maiden rules yet u can't even understand this poem?! How utterly stupid! :annoyed:

    BTW Pradeep HAS written some REALLY cool poems for my site too, so if you're interested check out his page here
  8. amit82cse

    amit82cse Silent observeR

    boy! you create poems like guitarist creates tunes....:)
  9. bhavna

    bhavna New Member

    meri kuch samajh nahin aya he he
  10. akkyy21

    akkyy21 #%@!$&

    Mere bhi nahin!
    If u did it 5 min ago,.. y did u post it man, cud have worked on it for a while!! :p:
  11. rocking_devil

    rocking_devil Banned

    @santosh chris - :NoNo: Mr. :banana: HEAD , :war:
  12. rechts_234

    rechts_234 New Member

    whoa ! **** ! :eek:: :eek:: santhosh oh man ! :(

    i feel stupid and flabbergasted at the same time ...

    i thought only few would actually get the poem in the first place... ;)

    i don't try to write poems anymore, coz i figured out that one way or the other they are always so damn negative ...

    i'm not that active in this group anymore ... thanks all
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