Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by horsesmouth, Mar 3, 2009.

  1. horsesmouth

    horsesmouth Active Member

    well this is a true story inspired from my own life....yea, I am angry with life......please help!

    When it comes to making decisions,
    why do I always go wrong?
    I work so hard and yet,
    success takes so long...

    I wonder what is it I did...
    Mebbe its the choices I made in haste.
    That annoyed my stars,
    and made my work go waste.

    I'd heard that hard work pays
    sweet fruits of yale
    So why is my patience put to the test?
    Why do my graphs seem to decline?
    I dont know what the secret to success is;
    To my soul it says to wait,
    and as my heart goes beating on,
    my head begins to frustrate....

    When will this nightmare end?
    When will I get what I want?
    Does life really offer us our thoughts?
    and give us all we hunt?

    The essence of life is:
    knowing our destinies that seldom take long.
    And take the right path to cross the desert,
    Where nothing could go wrong.
    Where every speck might help me,
    to follow my dreams,
    shape my future,
    and lead my life,
    the way it means to me.

    I begin my poems with tidiness n rhythm, n get lost in the middle........all jingle-jangle n mixed up....dunno why but feels nice.....guess it comes out naturally:D
    m starting to like this form of poetry!

    temme how u liked it
  2. r u really feeling so?
    Bad feeling wahts ur age ?
  3. horsesmouth

    horsesmouth Active Member

    n an employed jobless guy!
  4. augur

    augur I love bjr

    You don't have to be some age to be frustrated...
  5. horsesmouth

    horsesmouth Active Member

  6. augur

    augur I love bjr

    Please don't tax yourself.
  7. horsesmouth

    horsesmouth Active Member

    thanks........not that I was gonna waste my time on it anyway
  8. alienroar

    alienroar 6 string fanatic

    Well life is hell for more or less every creature in the world. Cant help there. Maybe get a girlfriend if u ain't got 1 :p:
  9. i think some ages are age enough others one must see ways....22 done half is two alones ...may be thats the problem !

    ur poem was not presented well...put some make up !
  10. augur

    augur I love bjr

    22 done half is two alones.

    *brain explodes*
  11. detritus

    detritus New Member

    Indeed. thought is overrated nowadays.

    reps to anyone who translates that for me
  12. horsesmouth

    horsesmouth Active Member

    I hav 1./.....which is y I bear it all......:)

    y is it that i cant understand ur statements?
    though I guess the response is for augur!?!
  13. ok i will expalain this oen although it wuld not make much poet need to make comparisions and tell things in form of hidden unclear images...Now from ur poem its quite evident u are relating ur happiness and the achivements u get like from job side or professional side...ur such a fool to think so but anyways ...u divided the pie of ur happyness into where u wanna be in future like "afeter the desert stuff" and Now "the career graph thingy (happning now) ....both of them are two different being a poet i see wht ever u write and dont ...u wrote 22 and i see the divide so i divided and got two parllel lines ( 11 is two parllel lines na ) So i said so !!
    may be im wrong...may be now u ppl should understand that im not absurd !..may be im still ;P

    just forgot to tell u ... this is from the mathematics side i ws just reading a book , two parllelines or rays as we may call do not make much of information set they are almost absurd they go on ...but an intersection (i.e. a point )is definate many things can be defined with resepct to it...use it some where..! ( this was jsut to give u a thought so that u come out of urs...i like horses they look gracefull )
  14. augur

    augur I love bjr

    *brain re-explodes*
  15. elfascinating

    elfascinating risqué

    I already told you monica .. you're just wasting our time here with all the useless chatter .. it has zero value.

    tits of GTFO
  16. detritus

    detritus New Member

    You're absolutely right.

    didnt make a difference.
  17. alienroar

    alienroar 6 string fanatic

    Then get rid of her.. simple :p: all problem gone.. he he. :)
  18. horsesmouth

    horsesmouth Active Member

    you read a mathematics book and decided to test on me..

    I shook my head off for yourr explanation li'l of it
  19. horsesmouth

    horsesmouth Active Member


    correction:I hav 1./.....which is y I bear it all......

    put "how" instead of "why"/.........guess tht wud explain!
  20. ^i better not explain....hmm

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