Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by horsesmouth, Nov 21, 2012.

  1. horsesmouth

    horsesmouth Active Member

    I don't want to be praising myself, but I really liked this one. Kinda good inspiration after a long time!

    I saw a freebird, soaring in the sky,
    I traced its path, a jigged-jagged flight,
    It perched on branches, chirped and plucked,
    on seeds and fruits, in and out of sight.

    It lacked a purpose, other than to live,
    nor it depended on others to give,
    and as I fixed my gaze on it,
    it turned to me momentarily.

    What did it see? Isolation and boredom?
    That I didn't move at all, was I chained to freedom?
    That there were confines of society?
    That I moved in a line, consenting with the crowd?
    That I'm civil, yet drunk; aware, yet proud?
    Blinkered by a leader's faith, covered in a shroud?

    I had goals on me, it had but just one,
    I had three pounds of brain, it almost had none.
    So the difference pays with the ability to think,
    to harm and kill, when mind is at the brink.
    I taught peace, but learnt of belligerence,
    learnt of norms, learnt to conform,
    and a whole lot of love and degrees of intelligence;
    but I craved for its simplicity, life and independence.

    As it flew past me in the warmth of the air,
    it gave me a moment's glance, a mocking stare.
    I had to follow, get accepted in my own herd,
    but it flew to another branch, just like a freebird.
  2. monica_decosta

    monica_decosta Active Member

    I loved it ... reminds me of the song from movie Rock star

    Phir se udd chala
    Udd ke choda hai jahan neeche ...
    duur duur loog baag meloon duurr ..
  3. such is life

    such is life New Member

    i really liked this
    it was very captivating right from the first couple of lines

    i especially liked the ending verse
    i felt an odd mixture of happiness an sadness while reading it.
    I'm happy for the bird but i long for that simplicity of life
    which really shouldn't be so hard to achieve but people are so caught up on all this useless bullshit and being controlled by the one percent. if everyone just stopped everything for even a day it would screw up their little world sigh anyway enough rambling
    I really do love this poem.
  4. monica_decosta

    monica_decosta Active Member

    ^what does this mean " little world sigh anyway enough rambling"
  5. horsesmouth

    horsesmouth Active Member

    ...little world. Sigh! Anyway, enough rambling!

  6. horsesmouth

    horsesmouth Active Member

    Hey, thanks! Good you could relate to it...the last couple of lines are to say that we can't/don't want to reject the world and society, have to live with it, compromise all the way, to not be branded anti-social.
    ..and though I hate it that way, I must say, there's no other way to really escape, other than living a hermit's life!
  7. horsesmouth

    horsesmouth Active Member

    I haven't seen the movie or heard it's songs, other than few lines of sadda haq...
    but the lines you said look good, which song is it?

    and thanks!
  8. alpha1

    alpha1 I BLUES!

    “One should as a rule respect public opinion in so far as is necessary to avoid starvation and to keep out of prison, but anything that goes beyond this is voluntary submission to an unnecessary tyranny, and is likely to interfere with happiness in all kinds of ways.”

    ― Bertrand Russell


    Horse: Lovely poem. :)
  9. horsesmouth

    horsesmouth Active Member

    100% true! Only options: accept or go somewhere else, where you are relatively less intolerable..

    And thanks
  10. monica_decosta

    monica_decosta Active Member

    the song is ... phir se udd chala

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