Forum Poem 1

I just edited esgallindeion's line to make it 10 syllables.

 

Which line are u talking bout?

 

Both lines which I posted, I just editted from esgallindeion's post.

 

Well, the first i think should be left the way it is. The second one, we can use urs. Alright?

 

Well, the whole purpose why I changed it was to make it 10 syllable, so that the poem that is produced is a sonnett. So now there are the following possibilities -
1. we do what you say, n so we dnt hve a sonnett
2. we leave both the way i editted, so we can still make a sonnett but with a bad line as you say
3. we further edit to improve my edition of esgallindeion's lines and so still have a sonnett..

Proper reasoning would suggest no 3 as the most suitable option. I hope you see my logic.

 

I was not following a meter, so i wanted it that way.Okay, if u want this to be a sonnet, i see ur logic. In that case, option 1. Lets retain ur lines. Probably the closest we'll get.

 

Hmm... i think ur right and we'll have to modify it a bit. Lets keep our options open. 1 to go with but if anyone has a better suggestion we'll shift to option 3.

 

Alright, so people, any suggestions?

 

lets complete some thing still hanging for a look !...