Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by vstanv, May 17, 2009.

  1. vstanv

    vstanv New Member

    It is an emotional state,
    Not a soul has escaped

    You can not even describe
    Can only feel it inside

    Its got the power
    To make you lose ur mind

    And you just cant control
    urself from losing
    the time

    As much as you take
    You'd wanna give it back

    Or even ten folds more
    This feeling,
    Oh its abstract.

    Ok. Enof descriptions
    Im ending the poem

    Cuz purpose is served,
    Ive escaped.
    this f...ing -

    The bleeped put word isnt what u think it is :D
  2. madhuresh

    madhuresh madhuresh

    i liked it ...atleast some thing new
  3. angel_of_sin

    angel_of_sin bassist.....

    da strting is a good poem.....bt da ending makes it look lyk a croem....lol...newayz good work....
  4. nimisha

    nimisha .:Forum Leader:.

    starting was ordinary.. end was awesome, gives good contrast..
  5. angel_of_sin

    angel_of_sin bassist.....

    nimisha and i gt opposite views somehow.............hmmmm we betta work on dat no????lol.....
  6. vstanv

    vstanv New Member

    lol yea... or even better, both of you work on a third view: "the whole poem was cool" xD

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