Expectations of my heart

Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by sukriti_hats, Jul 5, 2010.

  1. sukriti_hats

    sukriti_hats Member

    i wrote it today...thinking about...we give all happiness to everyone n some ppl dnt even bother to giv it back...but my heart expects it...
    this poem may be not too good...but it's fine for passing time

    EXPECTATIONS OF MY HEART

    Felicity and happiness is all we need
    Just like water needed by a seed
    A heart can be big enough to fit everyone in
    But it also wants a same heart to live in

    Almost 16 years have passed by
    The period wasn’t at all bleak and dry
    Spreading smiles and happiness was his duty
    Unbiased by anyone’s vileness or beauty

    And as usual the time went on and on
    His days finished at dusk and again started from dawn
    Unaware he was of what he actually wanted
    So people started taking him for granted

    Felicity he was giving to one and all
    Then he started expecting it in return- was the reason of his fall
    He began feeling finished, crushed and defected
    And in the end happiness was all he expected
    So tired he was of giving what he could not get
    And all old memories were never easy to forget

    Now he’s lying silently at the deepest place inside me
    Everyone’s well-being and everything fine he wants to see
    Beating like a bass he’s minding his duty of pumping blood
    Somewhere deep it still expects happiness’ flood

    Everything will be alright again he knows
    Waiting for a seraph he is, as through him my blood flows….

    -Sukriti, 5/7/2010
     
  2. walk_alone

    walk_alone **~~| An Atheist |~~**

    Its good that you are coming up with something or the other every now and then. Its important to understand your own limitations as a writer so that you can work over them.


    Cheers!!!
     
  3. horsesmouth

    horsesmouth Active Member

    I loved it...and the feelings touched something inside me...hmmm
    Gal, you're so good! :*
     
  4. nandy0894

    nandy0894 New Member

    hey cud u plz explain to me wat did u feel dat "myt not b gud"...gal...its amazin'...!! u rokk..!! \m/
     
  5. rickkkyrich

    rickkkyrich Guest

    mujhe yeh kavita boht pasand aayi.. :)
     
  6. ^ mujhe bhi

    its simple and has that mutual discovery kind of feeling inthe last few lines ... well written!!
     
  7. sukriti_hats

    sukriti_hats Member

    @walk_alone: thank u n i understand what u mean...well i ws thinking the same..but i couldn't keep myself from posting this one here
    @horsesmouth: thank u sooooooooooo much :) it touched u coz u feel the same..i kno that :)
    @nandy: well...aive hi likh diya tha lol and thanks so much :)

    @rickky and monica : mujhe yeh kavita aapke saamne prastut karke bahut prassanta hui :)
    hum dil se aapka shukriya ada karte hain :D
     

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