Everyone In This World

Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by Sharmontime, Feb 1, 2006.

  1. Sharmontime

    Sharmontime New Member

    Everyone in this world is so important
    None can kill self for any want
    as nothing more than life is so persistent.

    You are needed by your dependants
    whoever may be
    parents, siblings, lovers, or anyone,
    nothing is their world without you.

    You might be a guard or a president,
    nothing will work without your consent.
    So as anyone,
    Everyone in this world is important.

    Whatever you have bad done
    great, good, bad, or a murder
    you were not destined to do that,
    but you are there, to do
    the good, you have to, now.

    Doing the job today,
    that of tomorrow
    increases your life span
    by a day by a borrow from those
    subtracted when you were bad,
    for you to do only good.

    Forget all the accolades,
    remember the good of others,
    utilize the comments and suggestions
    heed to the advice
    be the man who is nice.

    Great is that feeling of
    If at all this feeling is true,
    it's a reality, otherwise
    everything remains an uncherished dream.

    Live for everyone in this world,
    Love everything in this world.
    Work for all your worth
    Give a meaning for your birth.
    For sure, reserved is your berth,
    in heaven,
    where all is even.

    Sharmontime :)
    My attempt.

    Please do tell hows this.
    your comments and suggestions are indeed valuable.
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  2. Sharmontime

    Sharmontime New Member

    :( :( :( not even one comment...is it really that bad???!!! not even one saying ki it's bad...:( sob sob...
  3. #iR@


    good effort :) just keep riting...
  4. Aka Oz

    Aka Oz /\K/\ - Ozy

  5. apurbajd

    apurbajd ~#$&*$@*^$

    ^^nice concept ...but the execution is not that good ..... keep writing u'll improve ... :)
  6. Sharmontime

    Sharmontime New Member

    thanks a lot....:D..i'll try.....:)
  7. Sharmontime

    Sharmontime New Member

    and i m sorry for my second post in this thread....i was expecting too much and was a wee bit emotional....hereafter i shall work more...thanks again.
  8. madhuresh

    madhuresh madhuresh

    hey y do u cry and all 4 comments what will it change in ur skill if some one says goood Excllent.....hah never do it ...to hell with what ppl say...u r the best judge 4 ur self...this post by u is pathatic ....whats Great in the feeling that "I AM WANTED" ..nothng great its a dillusion of amatures....feel like this
    "humare baad iss mehfil main afsaane bayyan hoonge
    "Zamana hum ko dhoondega najane hum kaha hoonge"
    BOY BE A MAN...if u r a girl forget all i said. :-D
  9. nimisha

    nimisha .:Forum Leader:.

    @sharmontime.... this was good effort...

    said in mahabhartaa..
    karm kartaa ja, fal ki apeksha mat kar...

    so keep up ur good work... my wishes for you..
  10. write2madhur

    write2madhur dowdiegeekgizmofreak

    Live for everyone in this world,
    Love everything in this world.
    Work for all your worth
    Give a meaning for your birth.
    For sure, reserved is your berth,
    in heaven,
    where all is even.

    i like the first three lines of this para. but somehow u were not able to do the nemesis
  11. Sharmontime

    Sharmontime New Member

    my spirits arise high,
    no more reasons to sigh.
    thinkin to thank you all anymore,
    'cos yet to come is much lore (more)...!!!

    i cant express myself in a better way than this...

    @apur i shall try to work upon tht part if possible and pls do help me....

    @madhuresh.. i considered u my bro ever since u replied to one of my poems. i shall work jus as you said.
    btw here i meant tht the feelin of "I am Wanted" is feeling responsible and not betrayin once own conscience.
    bit dificult to understand correctly those urduish hindi...please tell in english.

    @nimisha sister...those were my first ever reps...

    @madhur...i didnt get you. .
    i guess do you mean the execution of the poem as apur said?pls clarify.

    still i cant contain myself from thankin you all...:nw:
  12. BubblyMartini

    BubblyMartini !!!HAWM

    the poem is wonderful...
    hey is your name Kartik by any chance??
  13. Sharmontime

    Sharmontime New Member

    @bubbly...thanks for that appreciation dear. and do read and tell hows my other poems are...

    and you got it right. I am Karthik. ;)
    may i knw how u learnt that??though i can guess...but still i wanna knw!!!

    Sharmontime :cool:
  14. BubblyMartini

    BubblyMartini !!!HAWM

    you might've guessed it right
    and i'l surely read all your poems Karthik

    whats Sharmontime? well dont answer that i think know;)
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  15. Sharmontime

    Sharmontime New Member

    hey bubbly..hey hey bubbly...hats off to you for your interest in poetry...and also to your poems...i m yet to cover thm all though...
    and btw...i first wanna knw your guess on my id.thn i shall tell you. wanna prize for guessing rght? :p:

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