Even game

Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by Nanda, Mar 1, 2005.

  1. Nanda

    Nanda Bassist

    Even game

    life is a game, which you gotta play
    theres no respect, for what you say
    life is a gamble, on which you bet
    theres no profit every other day

    i am no stranger to victory here
    each and every day, is not your day
    roll the dice, pray for your luck,
    you cant be lucky , eacfh and every day

    you trun back, u cry for yesterday
    when u look ahead, hope for a better day
    i am here to see, your hope doesnt come true
    time and time , to win over you

    Theres no way, you get rid of me
    theres no way, ill let you go
    u hafta pay up, for what youve done
    i pay up, for what ive got

    my victory is your defeat here
    your victory is my defeat here
    no one wants to lose the game
    its better if you lose the game
  2. nadish

    nadish Active Member

    Nice poem I Like:
    "my victory is your defeat here
    your victory is my defeat here"
  3. tejas

    tejas ..........

    Now this one is much much better. Good work.
  4. agni

    agni New Member

    loved the concept...
  5. maverick8218

    maverick8218 New Member

    The concept is good, but you are changing the rhyming scheme for every stanza... that slightly disturbs the rythm the poem... Just a small piece of advice from me.

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