Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by nandy0894, Oct 2, 2010.

  1. nandy0894

    nandy0894 New Member

    i stare at this papr .. 4 d frst time i feel strangely empty..
    today is the frst timet i felt dat i actually was all alone..i felt dat even my soul betrayed me..
    my brain is brimmin' wid all thots ov thots
    i am calmly tryin to break thru 4m all d tyt knots..
    i wasn't successful..i went in vain
    my heart today beats as usual....bt 4 dis unbearable pain..
    i think of the time now...i think of the time passed by
    as i think...i feel this salty water roll by..
    if i were to know that i had to live without u
    if i were to know dat all alone by dis rough phase i had to go thru..
    if i were to know dat i no longer posess ur shoulder
    if i wer to no suddenly life wud b so practical nd colder..
    trust me wud neva hav lived nymore
    trust me i wud hav found myself even more disgraced dan a whore..
    i am empty today
    i feel everythin' .. slowly swayin' away...
    i need u .. nd u knw dat i do
    bt i know dat u won't cm back...
    i understand .. bt u knw dat widout u smthing's always gonna lack..
    its like a hole that has been punched thru my chest
    i wish it was not u..wish dat dis hole was easy to congest..
    all i say is that i lov u..nd will do dat 4eva..
    whereva u myt b..wateva d circumstances myt b.
    i won't let u go...dat easy..
  2. rickkkyrich

    rickkkyrich Guest

    Nice it is.. But please write properly... Its a pain to read..
  3. horsesmouth

    horsesmouth Active Member

    I liked it...very nice
    but it's terribly sad...
    You're really good :) awesome
  4. nandy0894

    nandy0894 New Member

    rickyrich...i'll keep dat in mind...thnk u.. :)
    hosemouth...thnx a lot...nd i normally write sad poetrv only.. :)
  5. horsesmouth

    horsesmouth Active Member

    yes i know..wen u're sad poetry comes naturally...
    Not the same with happiness...dunno why? Guess we don't think of other things that time. Which's why happy poems are more difficult to write...
    Sadness makes us empty, which opens gates for poetic ideas.
  6. andy.agrawal

    andy.agrawal New Member

    rilli nice...i liked it..!!nd yes pls do write properly..!!:D
  7. nandy0894

    nandy0894 New Member

    nd thnk u...and thnx andy.. :)
  8. sukriti_hats

    sukriti_hats Member

    mmmm... awesome :D
  9. nandy0894

    nandy0894 New Member

    thnx a ton..!! :D

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