Its all about what you need to survive and to live To show others you are in town too! Firing a few shots I made my presence felt and the sound went on echo till it died leaving some nasty sensation in my mind which I still nurture sometimes it hurts , I never mind And the pain looks up moment by moment day after day It changes its color from black to grey Just to show it is different from the pain you suffered before! A nightmare, with no real colors a flight of imagination and a sudden fall I get hurt and then realise I was dreaming. //Comments plz ..........
Its good and somehow reminds me of the structure of a movie script you can do better than this i like the second para the most
really bubbly is right...reminded me max payne...it was like a movie or game script....but really good one...
wow... NICE POEM MAN! well... i REALLLLLYYYY liked it! i mean seriously... cause wen i was reading this poem... i could imagine this whole real scene in ma mind and i was wondering at the same time if this is the image u want the reader to have... anyway forget that! U DID A PRETTY GOOD JOB! or it could be that i have the so called ABILITY to imagine a poem making a scene... NAHHHHHH... i am sure it was ur poem! AWESOME MAN! :rock: this has never happened to me before... i mean having sort of like visions in ma mind of reading a poem and seeing the story...i mean books yes... but poems NO!: hehe
@Devil ... Well, I used to play Max Payne a lot once, But u knw I cant really relate it to MP's script in wahtever way, dunno may be some subconscious thingy : ... thanx for reading neway @Vini .... U r always inspiring , thx for reps @Hira ... wat to say ? U made my day gal
It changes its color from black to grey Just to show it is different from the pain you suffered before! good thought.... good poem
