Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by apurbajd, Jun 7, 2006.

  1. apurbajd

    apurbajd ~#$&*$@*^$

    Its all about
    what you need
    to survive and to live
    To show others
    you are in town too!

    Firing a few shots
    I made my presence felt
    and the sound went on echo
    till it died
    leaving some nasty sensation
    in my mind
    which I still nurture
    sometimes it hurts , I never mind

    And the pain looks up
    moment by moment
    day after day
    It changes its color
    from black to grey
    Just to show it is different
    from the pain you suffered before!

    A nightmare,
    with no real colors
    a flight of imagination
    and a sudden fall
    I get hurt
    and then realise
    I was dreaming.

    //Comments plz .......... :)
    #iR@ and vini like this.
  2. BubblyMartini

    BubblyMartini !!!HAWM

    Its good
    and somehow reminds me of the structure of a movie script
    you can do better than this

    i like the second para the most
  3. apurbajd

    apurbajd ~#$&*$@*^$

    movie script ? :eek::

    Will try better next time ;-) thanx for reading
  4. really bubbly is right...reminded me max payne...it was like a movie or game script....but really good one...;)
  5. vini

    vini Repeat Offender

    brilliant poem brotha!!

    keep writin

    reps if i can
  6. #iR@


    wow... NICE POEM MAN! well... i REALLLLLYYYY liked it! i mean seriously... cause wen i was reading this poem... i could imagine this whole real scene in ma mind and i was wondering at the same time if this is the image u want the reader to have... anyway forget that! U DID A PRETTY GOOD JOB! or it could be that i have the so called ABILITY to imagine a poem making a scene... NAHHHHHH... i am sure it was ur poem! AWESOME MAN! :rock:

    this has never happened to me before... i mean having sort of like visions in ma mind of reading a poem and seeing the story...i mean books yes... but poems NO!:eek:: hehe
  7. apurbajd

    apurbajd ~#$&*$@*^$

    @Devil ... Well, I used to play Max Payne a lot once, But u knw I cant really relate it to MP's script in wahtever way, dunno may be some subconscious thingy :p: ... thanx for reading neway :)

    @Vini .... U r always inspiring , thx for reps

    @Hira ... wat to say ? U made my day gal :)
  8. madhuresh

    madhuresh madhuresh

    It changes its color
    from black to grey
    Just to show it is different
    from the pain you suffered before!

    good thought.... good poem
  9. apurbajd

    apurbajd ~#$&*$@*^$

    ^Thnx yaar ... :)

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