~Devil has Dreams~

Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by BubblyMartini, Jan 29, 2006.

  1. bjr

    bjr Lady of the Evening

    I'll give you a full-scale critique like I tend to do when I'm not very sure of what I'm saying...to kinda show you my line of thought.


    Gut instinct said "Cupid is the devil??" but reading on...I figured it couldn't possibly be and I explain why I think so.

    The last two lines here are the key to my interpretation of your verse. The way I'm looking at this, the devil is naught but the ghost of the past. A skeleton from the closet. He does walk just a step behind you all your life. Unleashing the unknown into the known would indicate moving on...i.e.- the present now merges the past.

    The "give me your hand" line would then refer to people who do live in the past...in crumbling castles they had made in the air a long time ago where you might kiss the hand that eventually did strangle your heart.

    This would then be the ghost of the present which is actually a clone since it merges with the past eventually.

    Looking at it this way, the rest pretty much falls into place.

    I do not for a minute think that I am thinking along the lines you thought about when you wrote this....It might be but that is improbable unless I start reading minds over the internet. That is the amazing part of poetry as ambigous as this. I could read it a million times yet not see what you are seeing.

    Thousands of questions still course through my mind....why did she say ash? Perhaps it was a cloud over the sun but I doubt it. What on earth is a rubble of crass? etc. Perhaps knowing you would have helped with some of these questions.


    Now the critique. Perhaps I've read this thread more carefully than most others on this forum but this is really good. Wonderful ideas put forth well. The flow was a bit messy here and there but apart from slight grammar and wording, I wouldn't change a thing. I did tell you that you were my favourite writer here and I stand vindicated.



    I would say though that you owe me an explanation here.
     
  2. BubblyMartini

    BubblyMartini !!!HAWM

    actually its very complicated
    donno where to start and what do i say dear

    but your good...real good..
    you've preety much "unleashed" the truth"

    Thanks for your words...
    if things permit and if you stil think you havent understood the ~Devil has Dreams~
    i'l give you the explaination..

    and yh i agree..
    if you'd know me, you would've known the real thing behind this poem
    but its good in a way that you dont ;)

    Thanks dear!..
     
  3. madhuresh

    madhuresh madhuresh

    Booth but ....:(
    i did'nt get it, did u Mr watson ?

    this Mr watson is a ghost (bob dilyan ke saath rehta hai) ...sacchiii
     
  4. BubblyMartini

    BubblyMartini !!!HAWM

    err... what?
     
  5. madhuresh

    madhuresh madhuresh

    galti ho gayi that was mr jones....mera mistake.....vo apna Bob Dyllan hai na(vahi jis ne "blowing with the wind" and many other's....likhe hain) he wrote a song called ballad of a thin man ...i could never under---stand it....i have the lyrics...........but sounds good app ki poem bhi aisi hi thi
    You walk into the room
    With your pencil in your hand
    You see somebody naked
    And you say, "Who is that man ?"
    You try so hard
    But you don't understand
    Just what you'll say
    When you get home.

    Because something is happening here
    But you don't know what it is
    Do you, Mister Jones ?

    You raise up your head
    And you ask, "Is this where it is ?"
    And somebody points to you and says
    "It's his"
    And you says, "What's mine ?"
    And somebody else says, "Where what is ?"
    And you say, "Oh my God
    Am I here all alone ?"

    But something is happening here
    But you don't know what it is
    Do you, Mister Jones ?

    You hand in your ticket
    And you go watch the geek
    Who immediately walks up to you
    When he hears you speak
    And says, "How does it feel
    To be such a freak ?"
    And you say, "Impossible"
    As he hands you a bone.

    And something is happening here
    But you don't know what it is
    Do you, Mister Jones ?

    You have many contacts
    Among the lumberjacks
    To get you facts
    When someone attacks your imagination
    But nobody has any respect
    Anyway they already expect you
    To all give a check
    To tax-deductible charity organizations.
    You've been with the professors
    And they've all liked your looks
    With great lawyers you have
    Discussed lepers and crooks
    You've been through all of
    F. Scott Fitzgerald's books
    You're very well read
    It's well known.


    so
     
  6. BubblyMartini

    BubblyMartini !!!HAWM

    Shukriya madhuresh ji:)
     
  7. BubblyMartini

    BubblyMartini !!!HAWM

    A friend said he thought i potrayed God as the devil :shock:
    did anyone else feel the same?..
     
  8. madhuresh

    madhuresh madhuresh

    yup ...last two lines reveal that i suppose...pata nahi...some one told me world is a weird place ...so kuch bhi hoo sakta hai.....BOOT CHIPAT JYEGA..
     
  9. #iR@

    #iR@ GANDI BACHI RELOADED

    good poems everyone!
     

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