~Devil has Dreams~

Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by BubblyMartini, Jan 29, 2006.

  1. BubblyMartini

    BubblyMartini !!!HAWM

    Devil has Dreams

    He walks a step behind you in the journey of life
    Says ”Give me your hand and everything will be alright”
    In oblivion lives your heart
    Not knowing who holds you close to heart
    He revels in the apathy of the void
    Kissing the hand that strangles the heart

    Rainbows turn into a different hue today
    The color of ashes mingles in them way up in the sky
    Time to bring the devil to life again
    Unleashing the unknown into the known

    Drinking a potion from the hands of the devils clone
    Give up your soul and your heart will not be alone

    Release not your dreams delight
    For the devil sells them off to the Master of dreams
    Who makes stars out of your dreams
    And puts them in the mane of the night

    Lovers wish on stars not knowing what they are made of
    Stake their heart’s in the devils favorite game
    Again he tosses a wish in the rubble of crass
    And laughs seeing it die its deserving death
    Making it a star in the vision of the wreath.

    ----'---<@


    Good or Bad do give me your honest comments
     
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  2. write2madhur

    write2madhur dowdiegeekgizmofreak

    bid adieu

    Dont set your eyes on anyone but me
    Sweet as honey clear as dew
    Drown me into them before i bid adieu....


    well said
    very impressive but obviously u dont want to let it go
     
  3. zoomingrocket

    zoomingrocket TeChNiCaL AdMiNiStRaToR

    Nice!
    I could never think that even a 'devil' can have feelings....

    Gud one dear!
    Keep it up....and keep writing..

    REgards,
    Zooom..!!
     
  4. BubblyMartini

    BubblyMartini !!!HAWM

    hey dude thats my signature..
    do comment on the poem if possible..
    the signature is one of my other poems titled "Ocean Eyes"

    @zoom-thanks
     
  5. amit82cse

    amit82cse Silent observeR

    Sometimes i find rhythm is not that great...

    e.g.
    Drinking a potion from the hands of the devils clone
    Give up your soul and your heart will be calm inside

    this could end like...
    Drinking a potion from the hands of the devils clone
    Give up your soul and your heart will not be alone


    overall good one.
     
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  6. BubblyMartini

    BubblyMartini !!!HAWM

    hey yeah!!
    thanks amit..it does make more sense now:eek::
     
  7. amit82cse

    amit82cse Silent observeR

    cool...from next time keep remember this, you will see by yourself that just a simple revision on rhythm can improve the quality tremendously.

    All the best!
     
  8. BubblyMartini

    BubblyMartini !!!HAWM

    yh...
    actually i dont pay much heed to the intricacies of a poem..
    write whatver comes to mind..
    main motive aint to write a good poem
    but relieve my brains of some things bothering me;)
    Thanks again..
     
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  9. write2madhur

    write2madhur dowdiegeekgizmofreak

    somehow ur poem can make someone paranoid it has meaning inside the meaning and then omore inside but on the whole it can be a specimen of a good poem keep it up and keep posting more
     
  10. Hardik

    Hardik .:.:.:BoRn TaLenT:.:.:.


    i liked these in particular....impressive imagination....
     
  11. BubblyMartini

    BubblyMartini !!!HAWM

    thanks Madhur and Hardik--

    it means a lot...
     
  12. write2madhur

    write2madhur dowdiegeekgizmofreak

    well martina actually ur poem is not getting away from my head esp those lines
    Drinking a potion from the hands of the devils clone
    Give up your soul and your heart will not be alone


    i told u it can make someone paranoid
     
  13. BubblyMartini

    BubblyMartini !!!HAWM

    uh oh...:eek:: ..i'm bad
     
  14. write2madhur

    write2madhur dowdiegeekgizmofreak

    Well ur not bad ur a genius a literary genius
    ur poem is as difficult as anatomy of human relationship
     
  15. DrSaurabh

    DrSaurabh Wh@+s Up D0C

    ok..am feeling dumb.....is it the night or is it the lack of anything grey in my head.....
    i read this.....and reread this....i dint understand this.....
    bubbly...tell me.....what is the devil a metaphor of...coz for the love of god..dont try to make me belive that the devil is just devil......no way ho say......:confused:
     
  16. DrSaurabh

    DrSaurabh Wh@+s Up D0C

    ok i agree with madhur.....damn....am getting damn paranoid...tryin to figure out, who or what devil is...:(
     
  17. DrSaurabh

    DrSaurabh Wh@+s Up D0C

    Dang :mad:
    the more i think about it...the more meanings this thing gives me...
    in a way...this could be an anti-love or an anti-relationship poem....
    the devil being cupid itslef...or the status of being in a relationship ...but the other possibilities of the metaphor for devil......scare me :help:
     
  18. BubblyMartini

    BubblyMartini !!!HAWM

    i think i should attach a caution tag to my poems..and maybe to me :p:
     
  19. nimisha

    nimisha .:Forum Leader:.

    awesome imagination....
    i liked this very much...
     
  20. BubblyMartini

    BubblyMartini !!!HAWM

    Thanks nimisha.. not trying to flatter you..but u write much better than i do

    Thanks again..
    **hugs**..
     

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