Devil has Dreams He walks a step behind you in the journey of life Says ”Give me your hand and everything will be alright” In oblivion lives your heart Not knowing who holds you close to heart He revels in the apathy of the void Kissing the hand that strangles the heart Rainbows turn into a different hue today The color of ashes mingles in them way up in the sky Time to bring the devil to life again Unleashing the unknown into the known Drinking a potion from the hands of the devils clone Give up your soul and your heart will not be alone Release not your dreams delight For the devil sells them off to the Master of dreams Who makes stars out of your dreams And puts them in the mane of the night Lovers wish on stars not knowing what they are made of Stake their heart’s in the devils favorite game Again he tosses a wish in the rubble of crass And laughs seeing it die its deserving death Making it a star in the vision of the wreath. ----'---<@ Good or Bad do give me your honest comments
bid adieu Dont set your eyes on anyone but me Sweet as honey clear as dew Drown me into them before i bid adieu.... well said very impressive but obviously u dont want to let it go
Nice! I could never think that even a 'devil' can have feelings.... Gud one dear! Keep it up....and keep writing.. REgards, Zooom..!!
hey dude thats my signature.. do comment on the poem if possible.. the signature is one of my other poems titled "Ocean Eyes" @zoom-thanks
Sometimes i find rhythm is not that great... e.g. Drinking a potion from the hands of the devils clone Give up your soul and your heart will be calm inside this could end like... Drinking a potion from the hands of the devils clone Give up your soul and your heart will not be alone overall good one.
cool...from next time keep remember this, you will see by yourself that just a simple revision on rhythm can improve the quality tremendously. All the best!
yh... actually i dont pay much heed to the intricacies of a poem.. write whatver comes to mind.. main motive aint to write a good poem but relieve my brains of some things bothering me Thanks again..
somehow ur poem can make someone paranoid it has meaning inside the meaning and then omore inside but on the whole it can be a specimen of a good poem keep it up and keep posting more
well martina actually ur poem is not getting away from my head esp those lines Drinking a potion from the hands of the devils clone Give up your soul and your heart will not be alone i told u it can make someone paranoid
Well ur not bad ur a genius a literary genius ur poem is as difficult as anatomy of human relationship
ok..am feeling dumb.....is it the night or is it the lack of anything grey in my head..... i read this.....and reread this....i dint understand this..... bubbly...tell me.....what is the devil a metaphor of...coz for the love of god..dont try to make me belive that the devil is just devil......no way ho say......
ok i agree with madhur.....damn....am getting damn paranoid...tryin to figure out, who or what devil is...
Dang the more i think about it...the more meanings this thing gives me... in a way...this could be an anti-love or an anti-relationship poem.... the devil being cupid itslef...or the status of being in a relationship ...but the other possibilities of the metaphor for devil......scare me :help:
Thanks nimisha.. not trying to flatter you..but u write much better than i do Thanks again.. **hugs**..