here is my most painful song:- plz do not make fun of this in any manner cause this is one which truly describes my life . I held forth my hand to touch and feel the petals of roses that were pouring on me. Touch not felt, but feeling had gone beyond the time, it ceased to bear witness to me. I saw it in her sight and beheld which neither any mere mortal nor elves had ever beheld. Saw what I thought never to see and felt what I thought never to feel. Oppurtunity was not to be mine but was already owned. Ever had anyone known such a delicate and loving creature to exist? But only in myths and old legends of love. Not even a single Lord of the Seven Seas beheld what I behold. Oh! What Bare Love? Then as I stood there with my bare hands clenched to the rose petal just to feel its presence in me, I wished to feel her presence, her existence in me. But, I was alone, neither could I feel the petal nor her, since both slipped away from me in due time. Throughout my roamings across the lands I was left alone forever.Now I ask you, Are warriors forbidden to have love?if so, ......It had been so close, yet so far.......! by Silent Dragon Note:A tear just rolled down my cheek, now.
now i understand the reason for the "silent_dragon" i donno if i'm right but u seem to have a lot inside u, but dont seem to find an answer..:shock: hope whever problems u have are sorted out n don worry i dont think anyone would make fun of this poem its lovely...
Good stuff man. Came from deep within, shows clearly. You dont need to worry about what others will think of it, when you write it with such honesty. Good work.
That was beautiful. On some level, I guess I could relate to it. As a poem it was wonderfully written and just with the help of words you have achieved a lot. You obviously love lord of the rings. I'm sorry but I can't help thinking how it relates so well to your life. You've hardly lived your life....I find it hard to think a poem as intense and deep to be well........nothing. I hope you are not offended. Keep up with the poems.
you don't have to worry about people laughing... many people go through this experience and yet it is a most painful one, as you said... i like ur style... the words just seem to fit...