-Deewani-

Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by BubblyMartini, Mar 25, 2006.

  1. BubblyMartini

    BubblyMartini !!!HAWM

    -Deewani-

    Jharoke main khadi chilman uthae
    Hawa uski zulfon ko sehlaane lagi
    Pairon main ghungroo ki khanak chubhi
    Aaj rijhana tha jise uski kami khalne lagi
    Surkh jode pe uske haaton ki mehndi na jache
    Surmedaar aankhen bhi aaj barasne lage
    Jab bekal choodiyon ka shor macha
    Dilkash maahol use adhura sa lagne laga
    Aietbaar na tha waqt ka
    Intezaar tha sirf deedar-e-dilbar ka
    Ik aakhri khwaish thi uski
    Deewana guzarega guli se ye aas thi uski
    Khalish uski khumaari ban gayi
    Shamma ki lau bujhi-bujhi si ho gayi
    Mehndi ka rang kuch aur surkh hua
    Khanjar girae woh sej ki taraf mud gayi
    Yaad tha farmaish ki ik muskurahatki kisine
    Toh woh hoton pe muskurahat liye hi so gayi

    --,-'---<@


    Whether you like it or you hate it
    gimme me your honest comments

    Thanks for Reading..
    .
     
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  2. madhuresh

    madhuresh madhuresh

    *claps* wah wah...abhi tune likha na reality
    isse kehten hain kavita nazm.....photo bhej do yaar .....Hum bhi to dhekhe unn muskuraate huee hoonthoon ko ;)
    again tooooooooooooooooooooooooo good poem
     
  3. BubblyMartini

    BubblyMartini !!!HAWM

    lol...agar meri baat chal rahi hai toh photu IGT album main hai :p
    aur isme jis mohtarma ka zikr hua hai..gar woh main hoti toh abhi reply nahi karti..;)

    jokes aside..
    Thanks dude!!
    appreciate it.. :)
     
  4. nimisha

    nimisha .:Forum Leader:.

    khalish uski..khumari hogayi....

    beautiful line...
    n truly nice poem
     
  5. BubblyMartini

    BubblyMartini !!!HAWM

    Thanks a lot Nimisha!
     
  6. sachoo

    sachoo drenched in my pain again

    humaari urdu thodi kamzor hain...hehehehehehe..

    phir bhi this is very nice ... sej here wud mean grave na..

    Mehndi ka rang kuch aur surkh hua
    Khanjar girae woh sej ki taraf mud gayi
    Yaad tha farmaish ki ik muskurahatki kisine
    Toh woh hoton pe muskurahat liye hi so gayi

    madhuresh ko photu dekhni hain.... :RollLol:
     
  7. BubblyMartini

    BubblyMartini !!!HAWM

    thanks sachoo..

    i guess i'l wait for some more comments and then give the explanation to the poem..
    people may not perceive what u perceive
    and me revealing it may spoit it;)
     
  8. BubblyMartini

    BubblyMartini !!!HAWM

    well ....like i said i'l give the explanation

    the poem is a kinda Story about a girl on her wedding night
    she's getting married to someone else
    she's waiting for her lover to come
    but losing hope she slits her wrists
    therefore Mehndi ka rang kuch aur surkh hua
    sej..is her bed...and sachoo you were partially right..that was her "resting place"

    i guess the perceptions will change after the explanation
    do lemme what do you'l think..
    i'l explain if you havent understood somethings..or anything at all..

    Thanks for reading..
     
  9. madhuresh

    madhuresh madhuresh

    "Surmedaar aankhen bhi aaj barasne lage"
    ye aisa nahi likte ...

    "Dilkash maahol ....
    ye mahool dilkash nahi...hota

    Shamma ki lau bujhi-bujhi si ho gayi
    ye aisa hai jaise....i became water water

    Khanjar girae woh sej ki taraf mud gayi
    here woh is unnecessary....

    Yaad tha farmaish ki ik muskurahatki kisine
    "Yaad tha farmaish ki thi muskurahat ki-kisine"....and over all ma

    last line shuld be
    vo hoonthon pe muskuraahat liye hi soo gayi.....Ek hoont pe muskurahat kaise aa sakti hai ;)
     
  10. BubblyMartini

    BubblyMartini !!!HAWM

    O ji!..Shaadi ka mahol dilkush nahi hota? :eek::
    shamma ki lau bujhi -bujhi ..kyoki woh uski saans ki tarah hai
     
  11. madhuresh

    madhuresh madhuresh

    ISS SAB KE BAAD

    Jo tune soocha vo pyara aur accha hai....so kuch bhi keh any words any awkward line ..mere ko to acchi lagi nazm :)
     
  12. madhuresh

    madhuresh madhuresh

    Debate mat kar.........
    Koi aur character bhi to nahi hai picture main .....aur bandi ka dil to rooo raha hai :(..dilkash = Dil + kasish (i.e bubbling with feelings, when u anticipate smthing good)

    lauu ya to bhuj jati hai ...ya hilti hai...i never herd bujhi bujhi...ye keval apni hindi films ke gaanoon main hoo sakta hai..haha
    and shamma = depicts that lauu only its not diyaa or candle its that yellow part ...like shamma jala dijiye dosent necessarily means candle jala...in poetry mostly used as light karo..........

    May be iam wrong...
     
  13. BubblyMartini

    BubblyMartini !!!HAWM

    ok!..i wont argue.. :eek::

    maybe i'm wrong..

    but....


    anwys forget it..
    Thanks for your comments..!
     
  14. Hardik

    Hardik .:.:.:BoRn TaLenT:.:.:.

    when i read it first i understood something else...just the few last lines doubted my understanding...but after that explanation i not got it....and...this time the size will say it...B-E-A-UTIFUL....:nw: :nw:
     

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