-Deewani- Jharoke main khadi chilman uthae Hawa uski zulfon ko sehlaane lagi Pairon main ghungroo ki khanak chubhi Aaj rijhana tha jise uski kami khalne lagi Surkh jode pe uske haaton ki mehndi na jache Surmedaar aankhen bhi aaj barasne lage Jab bekal choodiyon ka shor macha Dilkash maahol use adhura sa lagne laga Aietbaar na tha waqt ka Intezaar tha sirf deedar-e-dilbar ka Ik aakhri khwaish thi uski Deewana guzarega guli se ye aas thi uski Khalish uski khumaari ban gayi Shamma ki lau bujhi-bujhi si ho gayi Mehndi ka rang kuch aur surkh hua Khanjar girae woh sej ki taraf mud gayi Yaad tha farmaish ki ik muskurahatki kisine Toh woh hoton pe muskurahat liye hi so gayi --,-'---<@ Whether you like it or you hate it gimme me your honest comments Thanks for Reading.. .
*claps* wah wah...abhi tune likha na reality isse kehten hain kavita nazm.....photo bhej do yaar .....Hum bhi to dhekhe unn muskuraate huee hoonthoon ko again tooooooooooooooooooooooooo good poem
lol...agar meri baat chal rahi hai toh photu IGT album main hai aur isme jis mohtarma ka zikr hua hai..gar woh main hoti toh abhi reply nahi karti.. jokes aside.. Thanks dude!! appreciate it..
humaari urdu thodi kamzor hain...hehehehehehe.. phir bhi this is very nice ... sej here wud mean grave na.. Mehndi ka rang kuch aur surkh hua Khanjar girae woh sej ki taraf mud gayi Yaad tha farmaish ki ik muskurahatki kisine Toh woh hoton pe muskurahat liye hi so gayi madhuresh ko photu dekhni hain.... :RollLol:
thanks sachoo.. i guess i'l wait for some more comments and then give the explanation to the poem.. people may not perceive what u perceive and me revealing it may spoit it
well ....like i said i'l give the explanation the poem is a kinda Story about a girl on her wedding night she's getting married to someone else she's waiting for her lover to come but losing hope she slits her wrists therefore Mehndi ka rang kuch aur surkh hua sej..is her bed...and sachoo you were partially right..that was her "resting place" i guess the perceptions will change after the explanation do lemme what do you'l think.. i'l explain if you havent understood somethings..or anything at all.. Thanks for reading..
"Surmedaar aankhen bhi aaj barasne lage" ye aisa nahi likte ... "Dilkash maahol .... ye mahool dilkash nahi...hota Shamma ki lau bujhi-bujhi si ho gayi ye aisa hai jaise....i became water water Khanjar girae woh sej ki taraf mud gayi here woh is unnecessary.... Yaad tha farmaish ki ik muskurahatki kisine "Yaad tha farmaish ki thi muskurahat ki-kisine"....and over all ma last line shuld be vo hoonthon pe muskuraahat liye hi soo gayi.....Ek hoont pe muskurahat kaise aa sakti hai
O ji!..Shaadi ka mahol dilkush nahi hota? : shamma ki lau bujhi -bujhi ..kyoki woh uski saans ki tarah hai
ISS SAB KE BAAD Jo tune soocha vo pyara aur accha hai....so kuch bhi keh any words any awkward line ..mere ko to acchi lagi nazm
Debate mat kar......... Koi aur character bhi to nahi hai picture main .....aur bandi ka dil to rooo raha hai ..dilkash = Dil + kasish (i.e bubbling with feelings, when u anticipate smthing good) lauu ya to bhuj jati hai ...ya hilti hai...i never herd bujhi bujhi...ye keval apni hindi films ke gaanoon main hoo sakta hai..haha and shamma = depicts that lauu only its not diyaa or candle its that yellow part ...like shamma jala dijiye dosent necessarily means candle jala...in poetry mostly used as light karo.......... May be iam wrong...
when i read it first i understood something else...just the few last lines doubted my understanding...but after that explanation i not got it....and...this time the size will say it...B-E-A-UTIFUL....:nw: :nw: