death

Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by suchacutename, Jan 15, 2005.

  1. suchacutename

    suchacutename New Member

    Death

    i held her in my arms
    trying to comfort her
    hoping she would find
    solace even for a moment
    alas it was in my mind
    i watched her in pain
    wondered what
    someone had to gain
    felt helpless and empty
    as i watched her
    cry those empty tears
    proving all my fears
    i held her tight
    near my bosom
    as the light of life
    faded from her eyes
    i lay her down on the grownd
    cold lifeless there she lies
    felt abyss in my soul
    as i saw my hope die...
     
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  2. tejas

    tejas ..........

    Very good job. Flows well. Keep up the good work.
     
  3. Sanjay Mazumder

    Sanjay Mazumder ~..::MASTERMIND::..~

    Hey it's touching. Hope it happens to nobody. I liked the poem but I'm afraid of a death of somebody, so dear like that......
     
  4. suchacutename

    suchacutename New Member

    tejas..sanjay..

    thank you..
    SCN
     
  5. jayswami

    jayswami Blue J

    that was horrific
    i cant sleep now :shock:
     
  6. shak

    shak Harrr!

    ...would have gone nicley with romeo and juliet ...had shakespear thought of it...touching..but not very pleasent..good job
     
  7. drunken_wisdom

    drunken_wisdom WiSeCrAcKeR

    hey good work!reminds me of "last kiss" by pearl jam...
     
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  8. d_ist_urb_ed

    d_ist_urb_ed Genuflect b*tches!

    Cool work SCN, liked it:)
     
  9. suchacutename

    suchacutename New Member

    jay....

    since when did u start sleeping... :confused: and thank god u havnt read my other poems on my homepage..next thing i know is u have gone totally :insane:

    shahrukh..

    sometimes reality is not very pleasent...yet its reality something we all got to face one day or another...

    DW..

    havnt heard that :eek::

    dist..

    thks...

    it is not how u guys think...this poetry is about my hope dying not some person... :protest:
     
  10. propellerhead

    propellerhead Banned

    aaah :Lighten: I get it now :nw: :nw: :nw:
     
  11. Mr. Scary

    Mr. Scary Bass-tard Child


    exactly what i was thinking
     

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