Death, my friend, you are always there, from you, no one flee, you are everywhere, still, I wonder, why you are never here... Death, my friend, you release others from pain, all those people, they get free, so many slain, yet, I ask, why I am still here in vain... Death, my friend, you everywhere see, from you, just redemption, can I plea, here I ask, come here, set me free...
Build something more on it... Its too short... Give yr ideas a clarity n present dem as an art rather den plain rhyming sentences.
i think u had some tihng ....but u knda bowed down to the rhymes as pointed by distorted.... this one is herself asking for some more ideas...some more life ...ironically a poem bout death asking for more life is also an idea !!...try
