~ D N R ~

~DNR~

Smile if you may
Love ain’t no faye
Granting you no wishes
Making you walk in meshes
Cry not in longing
The earth treats tears as its belonging
Blame not the heart
For it wasn’t yours if it would depart
Like the sword in a sheathe
It reels beneath
Forever hugged by a wreath
Care as you may
Some hearts are made of clay
Moulding you into a different yo
Driving you into the blue
Forget not in vain lies a wait
Not one but all hearts are baits
Fear not death
For they remember you more when your gone
And in their hearts a place for you is born


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DNR in medical terminology means Do Not Resuscitate

Please dont hate me.. : it ain't an anti-love poem
Good or bad, do gimme your honest comments!

Thanks

 

well nice thought behind this poem. The irony of this world is that it doesnt care for the living ones but once they are gone everyone has good words for them

 

nice thoughts....

 

yup!
thats very true madhur!..thanks!
but it jus not about caring..everyone says they care..very few mean it
very few let it show..
sometimes the dead also have a lot to say..but i'l it leave it at that

thanks again!

and Hira hai sada ke liye
thanks babe!

 

well nice thought behind this poem. The irony of this world is that it doesnt care for the living ones but once they are gone everyone has good words for them.

 

huh??..............

 

"For they remember you more when your gone
And in their hearts a place for you is born"

very very deep thought, simply awesome.

can't understand rest of the poem though. may be cause last lines are too heavy and they take you to some different kind of emotions.

Babe...you have learned how to resurrect emotions in your readers.

Resurrect Your Writing, Redeem Your Soul

 

thanks Amit..
"in dust lies the soul forlorn" was gonna be the last line
But that would've taken away the magic of "And in their hearts a place for you is born"

Thanks again...

 

Smile if you may
Love ain’t no faye
Granting you no wishes
Making you walk in meshes
Cry not in longing
The earth treats tears as its belonging
Blame not the heart
For it wasn’t yours if it would depart
Like the sword in a sheathe
It reels beneath
Forever hugged by a wreath
Care as you may
Some hearts are made of clay
Moulding you into a different yo
Driving you into the blue
Forget not in vain lies a wait
Not one but all hearts are baits
Fear not death
For they remember you more when your gone
And in their hearts a place for you is born


the entire poem revovles around various forms of humanity, our gestures...and ofcourse abt one's heart... nice poem though...made it difficult to understand jus as famous poets do...keep comin...gotta learn more from you!!!

 

Thanks!!
i'm not famous...bit infamous :
my poems mean a lot to me..
thanks for your appreciation dear!

 

I strongly disagree wid u here .. jz becoz they'l remember u when ur gone doesn't mean u should die..
n Its a very narrow thinkin to make a place in someone's heart by givin ur life..
Makin a place in someone's heart or makin them remember u is not da essence nor motive of life .. Makin urself a strong character to face da adversities is .. I won't say sorry for Resuscitatin ya .. wat say da other guys ?

 

No Comments....

 

^^^Coz u know u can't challenge da above truth pointed out by me ..

 

I agree with mohsin...
I remember someone close telling me ..."Varshita your happiness doesnt depend on others... it should be independent of ******.. it shouldnt depend on his failures but your own success"
so.. when u actually sit down and introspect.. you will agree with him

 

Okay, the flow of the poem was a bit bumpy...the rhyming a tad forced which puts me off a little.



Absolutely loved the title. The content is really great here. I'm still not sure if I understand all of it...perhaps I might not ever but rest assured I shall read it over and over for sometimes.


If this is actually coming from something real, I'd feel bad for you.

 

i agree with varshu and mohsin as well....
There is no point of making u living in others' hearts by the presence of your death..U will live on their hearts forever because of your living...
and definitely, life's motive is not making other people remember u...It is all about u..if u are satisfied with u and ur life, then there's no point in making others remember u..Its about ur strength and capabilitites to stand against anything regardless of the difficulties...its just abt u..
I wudn't say ego is fantastic or excellent...but it is definitely a huiman characteristic...:beer:

 

Thanks Bjr, Varshu and dear li'l angela

@Bjr If this is actually coming from something real,even I'd feel bad for myself
thanks for your comments dear..will try and improve..the way i write..
sometimes its not good to write though....

Thanks Again!

 

^^^Am I mentioned up there .. or have I lost muh Eyesight ? :think:

 

err...i thought u would comment on my poem
and Then i'l thank you...

thanks for reading though..
its ok..doesnt matter..
i know how it is

 

^^^I didn't see varshita and angela commenting on ur poem .. they jz affirmed me .. so y bein harsh on me ?