Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by i'm_not_neo, Sep 2, 2007.

  1. i'm_not_neo

    i'm_not_neo el valor máximo absoluto

    Feels good to post poems here :dance:
    So here it is:


    Lonely night,
    Just me and the sky above,
    Lying on the rooftop
    Time was but a mere word then...

    I looked at those twinkling stars
    I didn't get why people found them fascinating..
    Days,years,eons will go by..
    but they'll still be there,twinkling...

    But years have gone by
    I'm not the person I used to be
    Maybe I've seen life from a bit closer
    I'm old and a lot wiser,
    to know how soon it'll all be over..

    See I know time is not just a mere word,
    The cause of pain,the mighty healer,all combined..
    And so is happiness,you can never have it at once,
    and the pursuit of happiness is still undefined..

    So I look at the sky now on a pleasant night,
    And I think I've changed,
    Life is all about the big picture I guess
    made up of happiness and depressions..
    I've seen enough to know that,
    Coz I see stars no more,just constellations..
  2. madhuresh

    madhuresh madhuresh

    good usage of the word constillation...pata ahi ye yeats ka style tha ek word se puri gamut of feelings ko represent karna....i liked it !
  3. rocker_vish

    rocker_vish New Member

    aweome work!!!!! keep postin....and neo how can u forget to .. :dance:
  4. i'm_not_neo

    i'm_not_neo el valor máximo absoluto

    Ok...well I didn't realize until you just said it..the whole "ek word se gamut of feelings"...don't know Yeats..I mean I never read his (or anyone's)work..thanks a lot man.
  5. i'm_not_neo

    i'm_not_neo el valor máximo absoluto

    Thanks a lot man..and yes:shock: how could I forget that!!!

  6. ~Bish

    ~Bish The Illusionist

    dude i hv always liked ur work.. but the best thing abt this poem is.. its something we all.. atleast me.. is going thru.. excellent pick of the word constellation.. on humor side.. when i read it 1st i thot.. constipation.. :)..

    recently watched to awesome movies.. which left me thinking for a while.. 1) Pursuit of happiness 2) Eternal sunshine of the spotless mind.. watch them..
  7. i'm_not_neo

    i'm_not_neo el valor máximo absoluto

  8. CrYpTiC_angel

    CrYpTiC_angel Rebelle!

    Nice and simple.. Not as great as some of your other poems, but I like it nonetheless!

    P.S. "not just a mere word" - Some redundancy there. You can't use both words in the same sentence like that, I'm sure.
  9. i'm_not_neo

    i'm_not_neo el valor máximo absoluto

    Ohhhh thank you..that's a nice compliment I must say..

    About the P.S....ohhh no you see I read the poem again to realize this...actually I refer to time as 'a mere word' at the beginning..hence,later, try to read it as
    time is not just 'a mere word'

    Other than that,I'm pretty sure I've seen this usage before,though I admit it is a bit ridiculous..
  10. maxeffect

    maxeffect New Member

    well crafted... liked the last two paras
    will rep u for this.. :banana:
  11. CrYpTiC_angel

    CrYpTiC_angel Rebelle!

    @not_neo.. OK :)
  12. i'm_not_neo

    i'm_not_neo el valor máximo absoluto

    @max^Thank you..comments are really appreciated.:)
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  13. #iR@


    how cud have i NOT read this poem?! :shock: A-M-A-ZING! actually enjoyed reading it cause ummm... this poem reminded me of a moment wid ma friends... good poem man... oh and REPS FOR SURE! :dance:
  14. i'm_not_neo

    i'm_not_neo el valor máximo absoluto

    @Cryptic..thank you..glad to know that :)
  15. i'm_not_neo

    i'm_not_neo el valor máximo absoluto

    lol...thank you!!!Ohhh reps..been so long since I got you!!

    Ohh I know how you could have not read this poem....your long absence at IGT!!!!!! that you're here, post poems!!!

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