complete the poem

still it looks disconected... but i liked tht para so i put it.......u decide/........

I smell of rain, as if it was here last night
or maybe it was you
sprinkling your love in the moonlight
touched me with the silence till few days back
and glanced at me through the window
from its broken glass

Now its the dew of the mild surprise
colours of the rainbow playing with my eyes
A breath of the air that gushed by your side
and the warming sun between the shadows hide

missed every touch and missed every kiss
missed the feelings they have in the bliss
this smell of the rain has made me feel
you are somewhere near, maybe behind a veil

Our love is a thirsty emptiness
some that you have, some that I share
we never knew how to express it
never did we try it, nor did we care

and the auburn hue of the setting sun
speaks a glory of the falling light,
and thundering above, the clouds then come
and drench me in the rain that was here last night.

 

this looks neat.

what say others ???

 

i agree this one's better