~By the Riverside…~

~By the Riverside…~

Today the clock ticks backwards
Thinking of her beaming with a crimson tide
He smiled an unframed way
Watching the lines on his palm go criss cross
He had covered her hand like an oyster one day
Turning round a moment passed him by
Life changed in a blink
Right there sitting on the brink
The water clear had faked a facade blur
The coolness eased his nerves
Right there she was sitting by him that day
Undoubtedly calm and smiling away
Tulips spoke to each other a secret sweet
Surrendering itself time had stopped
Benumbed not anymore,
She forgot her beliefs abjured
But moments in phase left them dazed
Unduly insane were those
Who nothing lasts forever said
Cause forever was a promise he kept
Unkempt were his memories of her being dear
It all seemed like yesterday
Rainbows werent all that grey
Bleakly blessed tomorrow
Unfurled the yesterday.
Bereft of her company now
He made a vow..

—`-,–;–<@

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i'm adding a poll with this poem
the ending is confusing to some
"the vow" could be getting the girl back
or forgetting her and leading a new life

do gimme your views on the poem
and your view on the ending of the poem
if you dont like it dont ignore the thread..
leave your comments
i'd appreciate honesty..

Thanks for reading

 

for the poll "never leave" ur things
and for the poem this is really good i wuld say sab se acchi.........reps added....aisa likha karo ...real..truth pure...

Vow should be getting ur thing back.........if i like some thing i take it home...no matter waht !

 

@bubbly please try to use different fonts and tinch to some color in your poems...Such long long text with so small text is hard to read...or my eyes are hurting me

 

err........i changed the color and put it in bold
hope thats fine :

 

soothing color..much better...

 

woohoo....awesome :nw:

very nice!
vow is to Bring Her back and Start A New Life? :think:

 

poll gir u forgot it !

 

^ ....ok yes!

 

bubbly ji app ka vote ?
hey ppl i voted for the second option...vahi hai right choice baby

 

deep stuff...nice i think...dear...:

 

um ...amit?...comments on the poem? :

Thanks Vini..

@Fat_Kax....thanks Dude!

@Manu- i prefer to post my views last..
its good not to let the poet/poetess's affect one's view..


and Please dont add "Ji" to my name...:shock:

 

Nice...Martina !

I always opt for a happy ending...!

Do keep sharing your thoughts...

Amanush...

 

poll...................

 

good! made me think a lot!

regarding the poll, well like Amanush, i also like a happy ending ;-)

 

Yipeee for the poll!

 

Thanks Apu and Amanush
a few more views and i'l be bit relieved.

 

:cry2:

Whyyyyyyy???? *SOB* Whhhyyyy?
Does it hafta be like that!!


...sniff i dont like the choices!!!!

-forgetting her n starting a new life...sniff...thats harsh man...and not to mention fkcin hard!!
-bringing her back and starting new life...thats a little too fantastical aint it?
-dont like the ending?--nah...didnt even consider it.

awesome peice, bubbly...
*still blubbering*

 

they never are <3




I dunno but the way I see it, it's a trick poll. The vow would be not forgetting her and leading a new life. I'm just saying this at first glance. I'll need some time with this to critique. Just know that I envy the way 2 girls on IGT write and you're one of them.

 

After this point, I dozed off on my computer for about 20 mins and now I cant seem to continue...I'ma gonna get back to the rest.

 

At this point of time, I also wish I knew enough about astrology to know if the criss cross of lines has a significant meaning to it.

hah, this part left me hot and bothered really...my emotions could easily be expressed by yahoo smileys. I wonder if my imagination is a tad overactive though.

Quite honestly, this would scare me if it meant what I thought it did. I'll wait for you to tell me about these eight lines that I've tried to make sense of in this post.

Ah, damn...once I get into a train of thought, I find it difficult to get out of it and find signs pointing to it all around. I'll leave it at this right now but trust me, girl, you owe me an explanation.