Deeply disappointed by love I linger here, unmovable, Condemned to observe the void...! In the silence of a room Pain has taken control of my being And I feel the slow beat of my heart I would like to wail, to despair for this love by now lost, but I stay here, unmovable, to observe the void...! I seek for the cause of such a torment, but the thoughts break loose and on me casts down an endless silence. Hope has abandoned these ruins, but the soul, as one who doesn't want to see the truth, closes its eyes and continues to believe in you, My Cruel Love...! Embracing the ultimate desire of never to step back in this life of eternal suffering, I would like to escape far, far away, but I stay here, unmovable, to observe the void....! I don't feel like understanding anymore, And to listen to more lies, I don't feel anymore like waiting to love the nonexistent one, I would now like to restart, to hope in another love, but I stay here, unmovable to observe the void...!
Very well written! I loved it. A grammatical mistake I found: It should be 'doesn't', shouldn't it? Also, although this: isn't incorrect, I wish you'd rephrase it!
hmmmm...logged into igt after a long time..saw ur poem in new posts and clicked right away..hehe, a worthwhile visit, needless to say! nicely done, very thought provoking..such poems r ur forte afterall!..just when i thot that the ending would get brighter u again pushed it back into dark..loved that part the most.. keep writing and keep posting!
A brilliant write all the way,really...your writing is expressive.I could feel what you were trying to say and the poem in itself made a lot of sense..rather than being just about a sad love story it is more about the war every heart broken person has to face after losing some1 and we indeed end up "observing the void".You've maintained the balance of hope and helplessness in every stanza..liked it a lot.Keep posting.
