few words.. a little ..a hiss a whisper just... and all even.... only presence mattered for making the things right even its just through the words... small attitude small understanding ... once we grow close micro developed into macro pores becomes transparent.. attitude becomes orthodox clamour goes unheard smile were for advantage presence irrevelant mood swings...agrumentative mindset cracked appeared between those soulmate those heartful promises of being for each other whole world started sinking like titanic helplessly watching and talking to myself philosphically dont shed your precious tears show must go on...worst is yet to come try to forgive... but sobbing in pillows with deep scares for the face off with truth for the belief i lost.... your comments are catalyst for me rohit astroguru26
i didnt like it... i especially didnt like the use of the word 'megasize' while i was reading i felt as if i was taking unneccessary gaps and breaks.. didnt like the structure. didnt really 'feel' it... having read ur other poems, i'm sure u can do better
seems u edited ur this poem too.... now it contents more hurt.. good one.. but rohit... when u edit poem tell us... or post it again in same thread.. how we r supposed to know otherwise.. btw..its good.... (but not best frm u..for sure)
i'm an idiot when it comes to reading edited versions of the same poem : my brain doesnt register the changes or smthng! does seem somewhat better though.. :
