Bicycles

Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by sohail288, Aug 13, 2007.

  1. sohail288

    sohail288 New Member

    As i'm getting better with the guitar day by day, i started writing songs also, and i've been writing a lot! Comments, suggestions?

    Bicycles

    Listen to the sounds,
    They make me aware.
    The lushness is crisp.
    I'll try not to stare.
    She winds into the heart,
    turns around,
    but she's blind in the dark.
    I see the time having effect.
    How many she serves.
    I'm but one of many.
    Idiling her soft curves.
    She stops for no one.
    Nor starts for no one.
    I'm but one of many.
    As her air trickles through my hair.
     
  2. madhuresh

    madhuresh madhuresh

    wow really this was goood ...crisp and smooth !
    keep writing ;)
     
  3. sohail288

    sohail288 New Member

    Thanks, i'll try to get better and better, and hopefully when my knowledge of song construction grows i'll be able to write some music to the songs too! That'll be something!
     

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