better without you

Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by 2good4you, Jan 16, 2007.

  1. 2good4you

    2good4you New Member

    I might be crying
    but its all fake
    Our break up,
    wasn't such a mistake.

    EVen though we wasted time,
    now i can get on with my life.
    Maybe i'll find someone new,
    someone who's love is true.

    My tears may fall
    but i'll end up laughing
    after it all.

    once i realize,
    that it was never love.
    And you weren't the one
    i had always dreamed of.

    So here i am,
    i am new,
    Im breathing, Smiling, im happy
    and its all without you.
     
  2. notty_lad

    notty_lad sudo undress

    How you doin' ?

    *wink*
     
  3. .:SpY_GaMe:.

    .:SpY_GaMe:. New Member

    lol that ^^ reminds me of this >>:grin:
     
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  4. anum324

    anum324 New Member

    nice n sweet....
     
  5. hehe who u are cheating ? ... nice expression !
     
  6. 2good4you

    2good4you New Member

    @ notty: tu sudhrega nai.... ;)
    @ spy: i would like it if u comment on my poem too....
    @ anum And monica: Thanks...
     
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  7. sanju_strings

    sanju_strings 50 Pai$e <3V/S<3 50 CeNt$

    nicely done

    stay happy enjoy !
     
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  8. born2tab

    born2tab rhythm guitarist


    gud one ...repped ya ..

    kya baat hai..for the previous some days i have been on a repping spree..
    Has the talent on igt increased or :think:
     
  9. zicky5608

    zicky5608 Power Shortage

    ^Your expecations have gone down.

    I loved the poem man :)...I like such types especially tho
     
  10. 2good4you

    2good4you New Member

    @sanju_strings: thanks, i'll surely stay happy :)
    @born2tab: thanx a lot for the reps.... finally i got some... *yay*
    @zicky: thanx for reading and appreciating...
     
  11. i'm_not_neo

    i'm_not_neo el valor máximo absoluto

    Wow,nice poem...really liked it...and I don't mean it in an offending way but its way better than "lonely users"...

    "once i realize,
    that it was never love.
    And you weren't the one
    i had always dreamed of."

    This is just one stanza I din't like though...it sorta feels like you're just convincing yourself that it wasn't meant to be while the rest of the poem just makes you feel that you were relieved of a "burden"...


    "So here i am,
    i am new,
    Im breathing, Smiling, im happy
    and its all without you."


    My favourite part...very original..very positive.it makes you realize that llife moves on..

    Reps.
     
  12. zicky5608

    zicky5608 Power Shortage

    ^
    Don't agree with what you said bout the stanza.
     
  13. 2good4you

    2good4you New Member

    @im_not_neo: thanks a lot...and ya lonely users was a lame poem, but its ok u learn from ur mistakes.. :p:..
     
  14. loyal

    loyal New Member

    Good one keep them comming!!
     
  15. bjr

    bjr Lady of the Evening

    You remind me of one of my best friends.

    About the controversial verse

    once i realize,
    that it was never love.
    And you weren't the one
    i had always dreamed of.



    I interpret this as you're still heart-broken because you're saying that you'll do the other things only once you realize....meaning you haven't realized it yet. You're just telling yourself everything else to be able to look beyond this point where you're still dreaming about "him" (?) This would then make me look at the poem in a whole new light where you're lying about everything that you said except this verse. This would mean that you're crying because you're heart broken and not because you're pretending to be heart broken.


    If this is the way you meant it, kudos to you. If I've just read too much into it, I'm sorry but I like my interpretation better than yours. I enjoyed reading this. Thank you.
     
  16. 2good4you

    2good4you New Member

    hey thanks.. i m happy u enjoyed reading it...

    regarding the controversial verse i would say that i just kept on writing the verses as the thoughts came to my mind... may be at that verse i was still
    thinking about him and then started forgetting him and moved on with life... its a transition from one state to another... (ya i m a science student)...

    but anyways ur way of interpreting was not bad either.. thanks again..
     
  17. bjr

    bjr Lady of the Evening

    <3 Can I hit on you please?



    Seriously speaking, If this was written naturally...perhaps subconsciously you weren't over it? Or maybe I'm just reading way too much into it.
     
  18. 2good4you

    2good4you New Member

    what a polite way to hit.... ;)

    ummmm..... ya......... even i dint think abt it so much....
     

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