Writing after a long time so maybe little rusty .. ______________________________________________________________________________ I carry some baggage too wretched and heavy pins me to the ground makes me walk so slow I drag my feet for some distance more look ahead in eternity where tiny stars of my hope glow I know Iam depleted I have carried it for so long yet something in me so stubborn just cant let it go its like a curse a never ending bane I need to live it and let the misery grow soon I will freeze somewhere along the path I walked may be turn into a milestone for other people to follow I know I will die with my baggage around staring in the space where tiny stars of my hope glow
gud poem...some how i felt it was plain witout any ambitious brighness nor the extream dark side ....some 1 told me life is all a shades of greay ...lol...i culd imagine a portrait inmy mind dipicting ur lines...gud effort
i like a poem which can be well understood by a layman.. i dont like high funda stuff which goes OHT.. ur poem was very plain and i like the plainness of it.. good one..
thnxs Rikki I agree with you Rikki , reader should be able to relate to the poem and make an imagery. you can go through my other poems in this forum and you will always find a metaphor Thxs again
i surely will... u can also read mine at my blog.. link is in my signature.. i hav not written for a long time now...