Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by walk_alone, Mar 30, 2010.

  1. walk_alone

    walk_alone **~~| An Atheist |~~**

    Writing after a long time so maybe little rusty ..

    I carry some baggage
    too wretched and heavy
    pins me to the ground
    makes me walk so slow

    I drag my feet
    for some distance more
    look ahead in eternity
    where tiny stars of my hope glow

    I know Iam depleted
    I have carried it for so long
    yet something in me so stubborn
    just cant let it go

    its like a curse
    a never ending bane
    I need to live it
    and let the misery grow

    soon I will freeze
    somewhere along the path I walked
    may be turn into a milestone
    for other people to follow

    I know I will die
    with my baggage around
    staring in the space
    where tiny stars of my hope glow
    horsesmouth likes this.
  2. cue_boy_23

    cue_boy_23 New Member

    hey how do u start a new post ?? cant find a link...
  3. walk_alone

    walk_alone **~~| An Atheist |~~**

    well you login and there is a link on your left size called "new threads"
  4. gud poem...some how i felt it was plain witout any ambitious brighness nor the extream dark side ....some 1 told me life is all a shades of greay culd imagine a portrait inmy mind dipicting ur lines...gud effort
  5. walk_alone

    walk_alone **~~| An Atheist |~~**

    thxs Monica

  6. rickkkyrich

    rickkkyrich Guest

    i like a poem which can be well understood by a layman.. i dont like high funda stuff which goes OHT.. ur poem was very plain and i like the plainness of it.. good one..
  7. walk_alone

    walk_alone **~~| An Atheist |~~**

    thnxs Rikki

    I agree with you Rikki , reader should be able to relate to the poem and make an imagery.

    you can go through my other poems in this forum and you will always find a metaphor

    Thxs again
  8. rickkkyrich

    rickkkyrich Guest

    i surely will... u can also read mine at my blog.. link is in my signature.. i hav not written for a long time now...
  9. walk_alone

    walk_alone **~~| An Atheist |~~**

    will surely do
  10. horsesmouth

    horsesmouth Active Member

    simplicity at its best! reps!
    i like the idea of walkin down an endless road!
  11. walk_alone

    walk_alone **~~| An Atheist |~~**

    thxs horsemouth .. i know you seem to be fascinated by "roads"

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