I don't think its an appropriate title but hey,its the poem thats important (I hope).A short poem with quick rhymes,please suggest any changes or additions even,I feel its kinda short. Its another Sunday again I'm on my way again the same road I've been walking on Trying to get over her trying to move on. Yet,I remember her smile her body ever so fragile her benevolence, her kindness Each kiss, each caress Her anger,her fears Arguments with trickling tears the fights, the quarrels her tiny little rebels Atlast the most important Her promise to be together forever and ever Yet my unwilling feet tread on the same path For years so many I lost my faith in promises if there ever was any. With flowers in one hand Right here I stand Wishing to be on the other side just to be by her side. Knowing that this is all I can do, With flowers and a tear to her grave I say "Rest in peace,my dear."
nice one... dont kno whether it was intentional or not..but somehow i felt a kinda suspense...i thot that some1 might hv ditched the person in the poem...but later on the story turnd out to b different...which made it more interesting & beautiful to me.... reps cuming ur way....:beer:
Yeah I was planning to bring the twist at the end of the poem,making every1 fell that he's just another guy trying to get over some girl who ditched him and then make them change their opinion at the end suddenly. Thank you for the reps and realising the twist,I thought it was a bit predictable.
As i wrote i can't judge how good or bad it is. But i gave u reps as i liked it. People told me reps are when u approve somebodys posting. I liked it so approved. Funny thing is that i get reps for spamming. got two green dots I hope real poets here will also give you reps. keep it up not_neo, rgds
