another 1 by me..

Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by har1s, Jan 1, 2006.

  1. har1s

    har1s <b>Untitled</b>

    hey ppl im back wid a new poem :)... this is a pretty unusual sort of poem and an unusual topic... :) plz comment !

    Here i sit in this empty cell
    thinking about the crime into which i fell

    We were really close to each other
    and we dearly loved one another

    But one day i shouted at him and i beat him
    He was stronger than expected and i couldnt defeat him

    I was astonished when he pulled out a blade...
    My love 4 him started to fade

    He stabbed and got me on the thigh
    and i was still wondering , why?! why?! why?!

    I cudnt take n e more of it
    i did not care one little bit

    Then i stabbed him too
    Didnt mean to kill him but he died

    Yes i killed my dearest friend
    but this was only 2 defend

    killin was not what i meant
    now mein herz brennt

    and here i sit in this empty cell
    thinkin abt the crime into which i fell.......

    PS : "mein herz brennt" is german meaning my heart burns
  2. har1s

    har1s <b>Untitled</b>

    come on ppl at least give some comments...
  3. PakPride

    PakPride New Member

    seeing as no one else has commented...ill share my wisdom (i dont have very much)

    -its an interesting topic...i think it should be continued on....why did u (in this poem) kill ur friend? what was the fight abt? I think u were in an abusive situation ...he pulls out a blade? wasnt much of a friend...

    thats all for now :)
  4. CrYpTiC_angel

    CrYpTiC_angel Rebelle!

    hmm.. kinda interesting.... but raises questions like y did u hit him in d 1st place and all...
  5. #iR@


    not bad.... and don't worry i have no questions. hehe
  6. har1s

    har1s <b>Untitled</b>

    well thnx all of u 4 ur comments..

    @ cryptic & pakpride... umm well i didnt think abt the reason to the fight when i wrote this poem...just wrote it... :).... well probably a good reason wud be...normal small quarrels and arguments between friendz...hota hai..ryt ?
  7. Garima

    Garima Born to rule <img src="images/smilies/rule.gif" bo

    lol....wondering why it happens to u...always :Laughing:
    anyways...nice poems...& thanx to Trish & PakPride who askd the that i got the answer...the moment that question popped up in muh mind....LOL

    Keep Writing....

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