Ek din teri ankhon main gir para tha mein Aur wahin par reh kar mein ouss saagar main taerne laga tha… Ouss jal main na jane Kya chaan maar raha tha mein Ki mujhe ek shisha mila Jiss main qaid ek anjaani Bhasha main likhi gayi Ek paighaam tha… Ek na khatm hone wali Bhanwar jo ahista ahista Raftaar haasil karte houe Mujhe oun andhere Gehraaiyon main ghasit.ta Le gaya … Wahan mein apne hosh o havaas Kho baitha, apne sansein bhi Mujhse jouda houe… Asha ke kiran bhi dikh na paaye Aur mein doubta chala gaya… Doubta chala gaya… Ant main ek boondh ansoo Main behkar bahar aa para Tumhare rukhsaar par… Tab pata chalaa ki Tumhare ansoo ka ek An.sh main bhi houn…! Hope you like it...! Amanush...
i love this part "Ant main ek boondh ansoo Main behkar bahar aa para Tumhare rukhsaar par… Tab pata chalaa ki Tumhare ansoo ka ek An.sh main bhi houn…!" Nice work Amanush...
boss is pe agar mein urdu mein hi comments don to ziada acha hai aap nay jo poem likhi hai no dought k buhat acha khayal hai but you have to learn urdu 1st poetry k b kuch asool hotay hein ..poetry b differnt style mein hoti hai 1.Ghazal 2.Nasar aap ki poetry hum nasar mein lay laitay hein but aap gramar to check karo apni Ek na khatm hone wali (wali nahi wala ) Bhanwar jo ahista ahista Raftaar haasil karte houe Mujhe oun andhere Gehraaiyon main ghasit.ta (ghasi-ta nahi ghasit-tay ) Le gaya … well may b aap nay likhnay mein mistake ki ho ..aur real mein poem aisi na ho..but you need correction
THANX DA......... AS SOON AS I GET SOME TIME I'LL GIVE MUSIC TO IT POST IT. THANX NE WAYS!! :rock: :rock: