Ankhon Ki Gehraayi...! ( Dedicated To Somendra)

Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by Amanush..., Oct 1, 2005.

  1. Amanush...

    Amanush... Tanha Rahi...!

    Ek din teri ankhon main
    gir para tha mein
    Aur wahin par reh kar
    mein ouss saagar main
    taerne laga tha…

    Ouss jal main na jane
    Kya chaan maar raha tha mein
    Ki mujhe ek shisha mila
    Jiss main qaid ek anjaani
    Bhasha main likhi gayi
    Ek paighaam tha…

    Ek na khatm hone wali
    Bhanwar jo ahista ahista
    Raftaar haasil karte houe
    Mujhe oun andhere
    Gehraaiyon main ghasit.ta
    Le gaya …

    Wahan mein apne hosh o havaas
    Kho baitha, apne sansein bhi
    Mujhse jouda houe…
    Asha ke kiran bhi dikh na paaye
    Aur mein doubta chala gaya…
    Doubta chala gaya…

    Ant main ek boondh ansoo
    Main behkar bahar aa para
    Tumhare rukhsaar par…
    Tab pata chalaa ki
    Tumhare ansoo ka ek
    An.sh main bhi houn…!

    Hope you like it...!

    Amanush...

    :)
     
  2. Gravity_defies

    Gravity_defies New Member

    hey nice one....
     
  3. BubblyMartini

    BubblyMartini !!!HAWM

    i love this part

    "Ant main ek boondh ansoo
    Main behkar bahar aa para
    Tumhare rukhsaar par…
    Tab pata chalaa ki
    Tumhare ansoo ka ek
    An.sh main bhi houn…!"

    Nice work Amanush...
     
  4. Ali_Riyaz

    Ali_Riyaz New Member

    boss is pe agar mein urdu mein hi comments don to ziada acha hai
    aap nay jo poem likhi hai no dought k buhat acha khayal hai but you have to learn urdu 1st
    poetry k b kuch asool hotay hein ..poetry b differnt style mein hoti hai
    1.Ghazal
    2.Nasar
    aap ki poetry hum nasar mein lay laitay hein but aap gramar to check karo apni
    Ek na khatm hone wali (wali nahi wala )
    Bhanwar jo ahista ahista
    Raftaar haasil karte houe
    Mujhe oun andhere
    Gehraaiyon main ghasit.ta (ghasi-ta nahi ghasit-tay )
    Le gaya …
    well may b aap nay likhnay mein mistake ki ho ..aur real mein poem aisi na ho..but
    you need correction
     
  5. somendra_guitar

    somendra_guitar New Member

    THANX DA.........
    AS SOON AS I GET SOME TIME I'LL GIVE MUSIC TO IT POST IT.

    THANX NE WAYS!! :rock: :rock: :cool:
     
  6. Rude_gal:)

    Rude_gal:) New Member

    Nice poem.....
     

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