Another 1 by me... Din mein kyun andhera chaaya rehta hai? Ye kiss ghum ka saaya behta hai? Koshish karte hai ujalo se haath milane ki Jo waada karte hai saath nibhaane ka! Nibhaa na saka ujala apna waada Andherein mein bass ek jhalak dikhlake de diya daga Kya gila kare ujalo se Jab kismat ne hi door kiya hai sapno se Kho jaayenge andheron main Kaise paayenge phirse ujalo ki jhalak Baar baar sannata kehta hai.. "Tujhe ab andhera hi sehna hai!" Thanks 4 reading!
Fat's man!!your really good... Tell you what dont live in the dark atleast put your candles on you love candles dont you?(Just messing around) Fat's do write something about happiness aswell...Would love to read that But this one is really good!Hats off to you
Thank's!I did wanna put the candles on but lost the lighter in the dark..lolz..! Will try turning clocks back & writing sumthing bou happiness! Luv' Fat's!
good....it was dark, somethng i want to write...but end up getting confused with sadness....so i always end up writing somethng sad....
ANDHERA KAYAM RAHEE.....chilll pilll....its getting dark too dark to see..seems like i'm knocking on knights doorrrrrrrrr..yaha jitni ladkiyan hain sab roo rhai hain .........................koi doctor sune ga to vo roog batayega...kyaa kehte hain vo yaar ....pneumonia ( ye nimisha kaha hai, u hv a patient girl) jokes apart though a nice attempt but u r very confined to some words and thoughts ...cant say beating around the bush ..but u know as in music u have to go from tonic to predominant..to dominant...then again to tonic do it like that here the predominant part is missing..... creat contrast....remember an artists heart is his head....dont let ur emotions overwhem ur poem
@ knight thank's!! @ garima im sure if u sit 2 write ul come out with something way better than mine!But thnks neway... @ mad thnks mate 4 ur advice will keep it in mind!
