...and she said she lived...

Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by #iR@, Apr 13, 2006.

  1. #iR@


    hello everyone... got over with some xams... found some free time so rote this... something that i haevn't read about before... its something again longer then wat i usually rite but anyway hope u guys like it and understand wat it is actually about...


    Living… she said
    Was her aim

    Running… She said
    Was not her trait

    And she said she lived

    Struggle… she said
    Was just a phase

    Time… she said
    Could never be escaped

    And she said she lived

    Hopes… she said
    Were her chains

    Stars… she said
    She wanted to reach

    And she said she lived

    Her joys buried deep down

    Her sorrows hidden

    And she said she lived

    In the darkness
    That seemed bright to her

    In the loneliness
    That made her discover herself

    Deep down somewhere she lays
    In the unknown grave

    Taking all her sorrows of yesterday
    Leaving us with the women of today

    And she said she lived…

    thx ppl...as always COMMENTS WELCOMED! :cool:
  2. abhimanjrekar

    abhimanjrekar ----> Zhol-Man<----

    ..i think i do know who this SHE is.....good one dear de beers....
  3. #iR@


    @ abhi...:RollLol: thx anyway! :)
    CrYpTiC_angel likes this.
  4. madhuresh

    madhuresh madhuresh

    ya acchi hai
    words we hear
    but nothing she says...

    and she lived..
  5. uj_6string

    uj_6string Nickelodean Addict :D

    aint that the way almost all of us are living???
    excellent poem.....loved it:rock:
    reps for u:beer:
  6. Garima

    Garima Born to rule <img src="images/smilies/rule.gif" bo

    Really nice.....
  7. #iR@


    @ madhuresh... thx for the reps! :)

    @ uj_6string... naahhh... i don't think soo! thx for the appreciation and the reps man! :rule:

    @ garima... thx for reading! :nw:
  8. CrYpTiC_angel

    CrYpTiC_angel Rebelle!

    It's a beautiful poem, hira.

    I don't frequent this forum much anymore, but I loved what I read just now.

    But the explanations in the brackets weren't really required... remove them!
  9. Hardik

    Hardik .:.:.:BoRn TaLenT:.:.:.

    i wanted to say da same thing......otherwise, its B-e-a-utiful...:rock:
  10. guitarangela

    guitarangela gran'ma

    really reallly really nice......very simple words but convey a very strong message....:nw: :nw: :nw:
    P.S: i am not freaked out from knowing our similarities;) ..havnt got time to come ol at the time u come..but definitely will catch ya soon:)
  11. #iR@


    @ cryptic... thx a lot gurl! but come on u have to visit these forums for reading my stuff! :eek:: always luv to hear from u! :) did wat u said... oh and thx for the reps!

    @ hardik... Th@Nk$ for both... reading and the reps! :)

    @ angela... thx gurl! :nw: ttys then! :)
  12. vini

    vini Repeat Offender

    this oughtta be a masterpiece....very well written..well expressed!..and the style was quite different!...loved it!

    Reps for u!
  13. nimisha

    nimisha .:Forum Leader:.

    loved the way u wrote..!!
  14. Sanjay Mazumder

    Sanjay Mazumder ~..::MASTERMIND::..~

    Nicely Written..... And the style is Unique.... It can be composed to a beautiful song...... Keep posting more of ur poems...... reps
  15. #iR@


    @ vini... THXXX! i got reps from a mod!:dance: i got reps from a mod! :p:

    @ nimisha... THANKSSSSSssssssssSSSSS!!!!! these words mean a lot from a poet like u! :)

    @ sanjay... thx man! hmmm... this is wat most ppl say to most of my poems that it can be turned into a song...:) thx for reps too! :nw:
  16. i'm_not_neo

    i'm_not_neo el valor máximo absoluto

    This is quality work...deserves reps.
  17. #iR@


    @ i am not neo... THX A LOT MAN! :) always lookin fwd to ur comments... almost forgot about this poem...
  18. bjr

    bjr Lady of the Evening

    Hira, I love you girl! I don't know how you can be 16 years old and write like this and I swear I wish I had a bit of your mind. Just don't give up writing...ever! I realize I'm commenting after almost a year and I never say anything different from what I've said today but still....you're good at this.
  19. #iR@


    ^*speechless* ummm... errrrr....

    *starts jumping of happiness*

    wow dat was one hell of a comment! :p thx man... u made ma day! :) oh and guess wat i'll be working on? one of those common wealth essays AGAIN... remember COLOURS? hahahhaa... will be posting it here AFTER i av ritten it so u can add to it! :p: hehe
  20. Hell'n Wheels

    Hell'n Wheels New Member

    I ran into a stranger as he passed by.
    "Oh, excuse me please" was my reply.
    He said, "Please excuse me too; wasn't even watching for you."
    We were very polite, this stranger and I.
    We went on our way and we said good-bye.
    But at home a different story is told,
    How we treat our loved ones, young and old.
    Later that day, cooking the evening meal,
    My son stood beside me very still.
    When I turned, I nearly knocked him down.
    "Move out of the way," I said with a frown.
    He walked away, his little heart broken.

    I didn't realize how harshly I'd spoken.
    While I lay awake in bed,
    God's still small voice came to me and said,
    "While dealing with a stranger, common courtesy you use,
    But the children you love, you seem to abuse.
    Go and Look on the kitchen floor,
    You'll find some flowers, there by the door.
    Those are the flowers he brought for you.
    He picked them hisself, pink, yellow and blue.
    He stood quietly not to spoil the surprise,
    And you never saw the tears in his eyes."
    By this time, I felt very small
    And now my tears began to fall.
    I quietly went and knelt by his bed;
    "Wake up, little man, wake up," I said.
    "Are these the flowers you picked for me?"
    He smiled, "I found 'em, out by the tree.
    I picked 'em because they're pretty like you.
    I knew you'd like 'em, especially the blue."
    I said, "Darlin', I'm sorry for the way I acted today;
    I shouldn't have yelled at you that way."
    He said, "Oh, Mom, that's okay. I love you anyway."
    I said, "Baby, You know, I love you too,
    and I do like the flowers, especially the blue."

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