Aaj kal likhne ke siwaa kuch kaam nahin hai Iss liye kalam ko zaraa sa aaraam nahin hai Mere dard bhare shayri se bhara mera diary Rehne do, tum par koyi bhi ilzaam nahin hai Bhoule se bhi jo toumko yaad na kiya meine Aissa koyi din, raat,subhah, shaam nahin hai Daak peti ko ek hazaar ek baar khola din ko Mayoos to houe jab tera paighaam nahin hai Nam hein ye chaksh to tumhara kya jaata hai Zaahir hai mere ashk ka koyi daam nahin hai Moujhe Jaan kaho,Jaanu kaho, acha lagta hai Weisse bhi, "Amanushâ mera naam nahin hai Amanush...
"Mere" dard bhare shayri se bhara mera diary Rehne do, tum par koyi bhi ilzaam nahin hai ye correct kat lo yaar Meri Baki vah vah reps added and Dost tu shayar kamaal ka hai, jo bhi tera naam hai
hmm..sorry to say it but it didnt touch me much as ur other poems do...but nonetheless it was surely a good attempt.
@ Madhu...! Aisse hi galtiyan bataate rehna...! Aap se hum khoush hein, Madhu...! Isse pasand karne ke liye shukriya... @ Vini...! Well, I will try to do my best next time, ' Sautan Ki Saheli ' is in workshop...! Amanush...
if this was from newbie.. i wud have praised.. but after knowing ur earlier work.. this one is just OK-OK or SO-SO..