Alone....

Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by #iR@, Sep 21, 2005.

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  1. #iR@

    #iR@ GANDI BACHI RELOADED

    here's my second poem posted on IGT......... DO COMMENT!!!!!!! Criticism IS WELCOMED!!!!!!! so COMMENT ON IT MAN! ;) will be looking forward for ur response ppl! so here goes........

    Thinking of the memories,
    That just bring me tears,
    Just make me morbid,
    The memories,
    I should have abandoned ages ago,
    I am still living wid them,
    Trying my best to move on,
    But life just isn’t on my side,
    I wish I could burry your memories in MY GRAVE,
    Where I could think of u in peace,
    Once I leave this game;
    World of cheaters,
    Once I am free from these chains,
    That I abhor,
    I can think of u in peace,
    I can think of u,
    And u ALONE!

    don't forget to COMMENT....... criticism is WELCOMED!:D
     
    #iR@, Sep 21, 2005
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    Garima, Gravity_defies and anshphenomenon like this.
  2. anshphenomenon

    anshphenomenon Rape me :boff:

    good one!!
    reps 4u!!
     
    anshphenomenon, Sep 21, 2005
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  3. #iR@

    #iR@ GANDI BACHI RELOADED

    ^ thanks! :D
     
    #iR@, Sep 21, 2005
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  4. BubblyMartini

    BubblyMartini !!!HAWM

    Lovely poem!
    nice work Hira!
     
    BubblyMartini, Sep 21, 2005
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  5. silent_dragon

    silent_dragon Immortal guitarist

    impressive dude!!!keep it up!!:cool:
     
    silent_dragon, Sep 21, 2005
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  6. #iR@

    #iR@ GANDI BACHI RELOADED

    @ bubbly & silent........ THANKS U GUYS! really makes me happy!:D

    any more comments ppl? waiting..........
     
    #iR@, Sep 21, 2005
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  7. jekyll

    jekyll Banned

    Hey u know i was almost havinf similar things wnadering in my mind,
    but thankfully i overcame all this morbidity.

    Anyway the poem was nice, keep up the good work.
     
    jekyll, Sep 21, 2005
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  8. #iR@

    #iR@ GANDI BACHI RELOADED

    ^ kool...... chalo good u got over it...... thanks anyway! hehehe
     
    #iR@, Sep 21, 2005
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  9. shaks

    shaks New Member

    Good poem man...............this tells us that u are with people but u r still alone in this world..........thats very nice
     
    shaks, Sep 21, 2005
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  10. hate_eternal

    hate_eternal Banned

    That was a really sweet poem. Keep it up.
     
    hate_eternal, Sep 22, 2005
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  11. rizaaj

    rizaaj Forum Leader

    nice one there lady.. keep writing....
     
    rizaaj, Sep 22, 2005
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  12. #iR@

    #iR@ GANDI BACHI RELOADED

    @ shaks......... THANKS a LOT........

    @ hate...... thanks u too man!!!!! reallly encouraging!

    @ rizaaj........ THANKS A LOT SIR!!!!!!!!! :p ;)

    more comments?
     
    #iR@, Sep 22, 2005
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  13. rocking_devil

    rocking_devil Banned

    hmm...good ....did u influence it from creed by any chance??
     
    rocking_devil, Sep 22, 2005
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  14. #iR@

    #iR@ GANDI BACHI RELOADED

    ^ NAHI!!!!! :annoyed:
     
    #iR@, Sep 22, 2005
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  15. Gravity_defies

    Gravity_defies New Member

    hey nice work.....reps 4 u.....
     
    Gravity_defies, Sep 24, 2005
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  16. #iR@

    #iR@ GANDI BACHI RELOADED

    ^ Thanks!!!! :d
     
    #iR@, Sep 24, 2005
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  17. #iR@

    #iR@ GANDI BACHI RELOADED

    anymore comments ppl? :think:
     
    #iR@, Sep 25, 2005
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  18. Garima

    Garima Born to rule <img src="images/smilies/rule.gif" bo

    Nice work done yaar....
    Reps for u :beer:
    Keep them flowing here :)
     
    Garima, Sep 26, 2005
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  19. #iR@

    #iR@ GANDI BACHI RELOADED

    ^ THANKS A LOT!!!!!!! :beer:
     
    #iR@, Sep 26, 2005
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  20. #iR@

    #iR@ GANDI BACHI RELOADED

    any more comments? :think: :cool: :think:
     
    #iR@, Sep 29, 2005
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