**... Ajnabi ...**

Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by Amanush..., Jul 23, 2005.

  1. Amanush...

    Amanush... Tanha Rahi...!

    Lagaavat jiss se jitna hota hai
    Jhagraa ouss se utna hota hai

    Ajnabi Jaan se ajeez ban jaye
    Eissa hi koyi ghatna hota hai

    Yaad karte hi ouss sadme ko
    Na poucho dard kitna hota hai

    Teri ankhon main phir jhanka
    Saagar bhi gehra itna hota hai

    Wafaa ke kinaare par hi rehna
    Saakh 'Mushkil' jeetna hota hai


    Saakh :Trust
     
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  2. BubblyMartini

    BubblyMartini !!!HAWM

    Your Gifted!!:)
     
  3. somendra_guitar

    somendra_guitar New Member

    hmm.... :think:
    gud but not upto wat i expected frm u
    some gramatical mistakes also present

    well i think u wud not take it otherwise,i think i being an admirer of ur poems have a right to be a criticizer too,
    hope u'll use better grammer frm next time!!

    :rock: :rock:
     
  4. Amanush...

    Amanush... Tanha Rahi...!

    Thanks...Martina for your appreciation!

    Do keep encouraging and take care...ok?

    :)
     
  5. Amanush...

    Amanush... Tanha Rahi...!

    Somendra...! I adore frankness...!and I also like friends who
    are like a mirror for me.I really appreciate your critics...Kasam se!

    Weisse na Hindi na hi Angresi hamari Matribhasa hai...!Jo ehsaas
    dil main utpan hota hai...oussi ko aksharon mein dhaal dete hein!

    Kripaya,aap hamein batadijiye kahan par galti houi hai...!

    Shukriya...

    :)
     
  6. cYpHeR

    cYpHeR Banned

    u rule man... :nw: :nw:

    but yea.....previous one ws better....
     
  7. somendra_guitar

    somendra_guitar New Member

    Lagaavat jiss se jitni hota hai
    Jhagraa ouss se utna hota hai

    Ajnabi Jaan se ajeez ban jaye
    Eissa hi koyi ghatna hoti hai

    Yaad karte hi ouss sadme ko
    Na poucho dard kitna hota hai

    Teri ankhon main phir jhanka
    Saagar bhi gehra itna hota hai

    Wafaa ke kinaare par hi rehna
    Saakh 'Mushkil' jeetna hota hai

    the bold words had incorrect grammer previously!!!
     
  8. vini

    vini Repeat Offender

    ummm... :think: not bad

    tahda!!
     
  9. $cReWdR!veR

    $cReWdR!veR .:: Sweetheart ::.

    :beer: :rock: :beer:
     
  10. Amanush...

    Amanush... Tanha Rahi...!

    Thanks...!

    :)
     
  11. Punnu

    Punnu New Member

    jus tooooooooooo gud....Amanush keep up the gud work
     
  12. Amanush...

    Amanush... Tanha Rahi...!

    Shukriya...Punnu!

    Take care...ok ?

    :)
     
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  13. lord_neo

    lord_neo Guest

    One of the best poets at IGT!
     
  14. Amanush...

    Amanush... Tanha Rahi...!

    You have left me wordless...Lord!

    :eek::

    Thanks

    Amanush...

    :)
     
  15. jal_babe

    jal_babe im a SEDUCER

    so cuweet!
     
  16. Amanush...

    Amanush... Tanha Rahi...!

    Thank you jal_babe

    :)
     

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