Lagaavat jiss se jitna hota hai Jhagraa ouss se utna hota hai Ajnabi Jaan se ajeez ban jaye Eissa hi koyi ghatna hota hai Yaad karte hi ouss sadme ko Na poucho dard kitna hota hai Teri ankhon main phir jhanka Saagar bhi gehra itna hota hai Wafaa ke kinaare par hi rehna Saakh 'Mushkil' jeetna hota hai Saakh :Trust
hmm.... :think: gud but not upto wat i expected frm u some gramatical mistakes also present well i think u wud not take it otherwise,i think i being an admirer of ur poems have a right to be a criticizer too, hope u'll use better grammer frm next time!! :rock: :rock:
Somendra...! I adore frankness...!and I also like friends who are like a mirror for me.I really appreciate your critics...Kasam se! Weisse na Hindi na hi Angresi hamari Matribhasa hai...!Jo ehsaas dil main utpan hota hai...oussi ko aksharon mein dhaal dete hein! Kripaya,aap hamein batadijiye kahan par galti houi hai...! Shukriya...
Lagaavat jiss se jitni hota hai Jhagraa ouss se utna hota hai Ajnabi Jaan se ajeez ban jaye Eissa hi koyi ghatna hoti hai Yaad karte hi ouss sadme ko Na poucho dard kitna hota hai Teri ankhon main phir jhanka Saagar bhi gehra itna hota hai Wafaa ke kinaare par hi rehna Saakh 'Mushkil' jeetna hota hai the bold words had incorrect grammer previously!!!