Aj bhi....

Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by Garima, Mar 17, 2006.

  1. Garima

    Garima Born to rule <img src="images/smilies/rule.gif" bo

    I have written this one aftr a long time....keeping in mind that no1 cries aftr reading this....hope to succeed...lemme kno if I did :grin:


    Aj bhi dil me ek yaad rava hai
    Tune jo kahi thi wo har baat rava hai
    Chah kar bhi bhoolta nahi tera saath
    Teri baahoan me jo beetee thi wo sham java hai

    Teri saanso ki garmi aj bhi mere zehen me rava hai
    Tere sparsh ki wo gudgudi aj bhi mere badan me rava hai
    Chah kar bhi bhoolta nahi wo sharmana tera
    Tere labo ne diye the jo jaam, wo aj bhi mere labo par java hai

    Tere har wade ne dikhaya tha jo sapna,
    Wo aj bhi in aankhoan me rava hai
    Tujhe dekh ke ruki thi meri jo saanse
    Wo aj bhi waha ki waha hai

    Har cheez vaisi hi hai jaisi tu chhod ke gaya tha
    Kami hai to bas teri
    Aankhein doondti hain tujhe har ek soorat me
    Par pata nahi aj tu kahan hai…

    Wo shaam hi kuchh or thi
    Tere sang guzare un palo ki baat hi kuchh or thi
    Jaisa ki maine pehle bhi kaha hai
    Tere saath ki madhoshi aj bhi mere dil me java hai….


    Rava...not sooji:p: here its used as 'Fresh'.
     
  2. BubblyMartini

    BubblyMartini !!!HAWM

    </3 shouldnt have read it now..

    ur good dear..
    liked the poem..

    *hugs*
     
  3. Garima

    Garima Born to rule <img src="images/smilies/rule.gif" bo

    :confused:
    thanx for reading...
     
  4. Varshita

    Varshita New Member

    special connotations for a special evening spent !!
    good...
     
  5. sachoo

    sachoo drenched in my pain again

    Kya khaane mein aaj bhi bana rava hain. :p: ..sorry..hehehe

    but java :shock: or did u mean javan. Aj shud be Aaj.

    nice poem indeed n reminded me of "mera kuch saamaan tumhare paas rava hain ..oops .. rakaha hain ..pada hain..something"..

    keep writing
    sachin
     
  6. Garima

    Garima Born to rule <img src="images/smilies/rule.gif" bo

    ^^^Life is an exaggeration...
    it might not b special....but it depends on u how u want to remember it...i chose to smile...:):)
     
  7. Garima

    Garima Born to rule <img src="images/smilies/rule.gif" bo

    I agree ...Java was used so that it can go with rava...& Aaj as Aj...ummm m too lazy to add an 'A' ther :p:
    Thanks for that comparisn :nw:
     
  8. sachoo

    sachoo drenched in my pain again

    yeah.. ur right otherwise if u hv to go with javan, it wud hv been ravan (this is actually correct but then it wud hv reminded of ramayan :think: ).
    java >> programmer's language :dance: .
     
  9. Sanjay Mazumder

    Sanjay Mazumder ~..::MASTERMIND::..~

    Is "rava" = "rawan"

    and "java" = "jawan"

    I really cudnt understand these words.

    Well, overall, it's nice.
     
  10. sachoo

    sachoo drenched in my pain again

    yep yep yep yep..finally sanju baba.. lekin no reps ;)
     
  11. walk_alone

    walk_alone **~~| An Atheist |~~**

    A poem after a long time.

    Gud one but wdnt say a great one.
    Usage of few words seems to be forced prabably to make few para rhymed.
     
  12. Garima

    Garima Born to rule <img src="images/smilies/rule.gif" bo

    wooop...here u go...
    i thnk this how u spell it in English...i mean whn u 'try' to write Urdu in English:grin:
    i got confused with 'ravan' with as Sachoo said reminded me of Ramayan....
    Java....shud b javan i thnk...cos 'Jawan' wud seem Army ka "Jawan" :p:
    Thanx:)
     
  13. Garima

    Garima Born to rule <img src="images/smilies/rule.gif" bo

    Thanks for reading though ;)
     
  14. apurbajd

    apurbajd ~#$&amp;*$@*^$

    ^^Good .... bt nt like ur other poems ....
     
  15. abhimanjrekar

    abhimanjrekar ----&gt; Zhol-Man&lt;----

    thats the way it iss........this one was good poem..though i felt like eating rava by the time i finished it..nah..but i loved the poem..and now u ve confused me as to if i should get the tissue papers or no for ur further poems...good one....saaru che.....:p:
     
  16. #iR@

    #iR@ GANDI BACHI RELOADED

    good to read something from u... i am telling u sweety u rite REALLY WELL! i luv ur work! :)
     
  17. Varshita

    Varshita New Member

    maybe u could have used "ravaan"... and "javaan"
    Just a suggestion :eek::
     
  18. Sanjay Mazumder

    Sanjay Mazumder ~..::MASTERMIND::..~

    ^^^ it's more funny :)
     
  19. nimisha

    nimisha .:Forum Leader:.

    nicee poemm...
    but not great as per garima's standard..

    cant help saying this.... but what wud poem mean if rava=suji..
    i shud shut up now..
    lol...hope disturbed wont say im spamming again...
     
  20. Sanjay Mazumder

    Sanjay Mazumder ~..::MASTERMIND::..~

    well, java really confused me at first. I thot dat what's the computer langeage Java doin out here in Garima's poems. lol.... :)
     

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