aarazuu hai...

Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by nimisha, Dec 15, 2005.

  1. nimisha

    nimisha .:Forum Leader:.

    aarazuu hai vafaa kare ko_ii
    zoothi hi sahi,ek dafaa kare koi..

    murjha jaye phool khilne se pehle,
    dil ki kaliyon ko na aise khafa kare koi..
    aarazuu hai...

    dil sheesha hai mera,choor-choor ho jae,
    aise sitamm na bewafaa kare koi..
    aarazuu hai...

    palkon pe bithaake,le chale sapnon me,
    saare gum hamaare rafaa kare koi..

    aarazuu hai vafaa kare ko_ii
    zoothi hi sahi,ek dafaa kare koi..

  2. vishwa_81us

    vishwa_81us Banned

    ^^^ summary..

    Pal bhar ke liye koi hame pyar kar le..
    Jhoota hi sahi..
  3. Babydoll

    Babydoll New Member

    Too good nims...
  4. #iR@


    good... keep riting gurl! :)
  5. nimisha

    nimisha .:Forum Leader:.

    @babydoll n hira....

    thanks for bumping into this old thread...n reminding me those old memories when i was very new here...
    posting poetries....n waiting for replies so eagerly...
    huh...........olddd dayssss......!!!! *sigh* *sigh* *sigh*
  6. sachoo

    sachoo drenched in my pain again


    nimisha, dafaa kare koi?? dafaa = dafaa ho jao waala. or something other.
  7. nimisha

    nimisha .:Forum Leader:.

    ek dafaa kare koi= some one can do it at least one time...
    ek dafaa= ek baar...

    (hope im not messing up wit urdu here...im not expert in it anyways)
  8. abhimanjrekar

    abhimanjrekar ----> Zhol-Man<----

    ^^ daffa ..reminds me of hira now....yaar nice poem nimmo...
  9. sachoo

    sachoo drenched in my pain again

    oh..k got it now. thnx.

    no no, u r absolutely not messing it up.
  10. nimisha

    nimisha .:Forum Leader:.

    thanks again to all to appreciate my attempt at this poetry..
    but i dont really like this poem as i've written it in very early days..when i didnt knew how to write good poetry much..(i dont know it still)

    so criticising my own poem..
    this poem lacks newness..as examples given in it are quite ordinary n used by other writers thousands of time..
    the poetry dont give exact idea about pain..whether its of break up or its coz of waiting for someone..
    thoughts r very short...n mood changes in every stanza...

    huh... now feels like..im best critic ever..... what u say people????
  11. madhuresh

    madhuresh madhuresh

    nah...its not all u said, its just ur urge to say something...ek sher main likh sakti thi puri situation ko...

    Deer tak aavara hava ballon ko bhikharati rahi
    baithe hain intazaare main aa ke suljha de koi....
    Deer tak aavara hava ballon ko bhikharati rahi
    aarazoo ki aarazoo hai aa ke suljha de koi....

    kuch aage bhi likha ja sakta hai....par time nahi hai...

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