Aansu

Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by demetron, Apr 11, 2009.

  1. demetron

    demetron New Member

    Aansu jo yon bahte hain........,
    tumse ye kuchh kahte hain........
    tumko na ho yakin.
    to phir na hi sahi.

    tere dil me par hum rahte hain..

    khoye-khoye se kyon rahte hain......
    gum ke sagar me kyon bahte hain......
    tumko khabar hi nahi.
    chalo ye bhi sahi.

    hum kaise-kaise sitam sahte hain.

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    hi guys its my 1st post to poetry section even its first time i make some lines/poem/lyrics whatever :)
    don't know its ok or s**k but i post it.
     
  2. monica_decosta

    monica_decosta Active Member

    hey i liked it
    but u knw ..!!
     
  3. demetron

    demetron New Member

    i knw
    what?
    BTW:thanks for reply.
     
  4. monica_decosta

    monica_decosta Active Member

    first its a sad poem.. why dont u write a bright one
    like
    ho gaya hai tujhse hi
    kuch nahi kar sakte abb
    kyaa kehna hai, hai kyaa nahi
    vo tu jaane ya jaane rab

    dikkat hogi seh lenge, ansoo ayenge behlenge
    saath tera hoga to kaisa bhi kamara ho reh lenge..

    jyada lavz nahi chiye, khamoosh nazar se kehna hai
    koi aur thikana nahii hai abb, bus tere dil main rehna hai
     
  5. demetron

    demetron New Member

    ok!
    but i was write this in sad mood.even this time i am also sad,so how can any body write a bright poem with sad mood :(
     

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