A Tale of Love

Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by horsesmouth, Nov 9, 2011.

  1. horsesmouth

    horsesmouth Active Member

    Hey :)
    Well, a long time since I've written probably anything. This is just another one of my far-fetched imaginations
    No need to elaborate as its pretty straightforward.

    It stuttered with a broken wing,
    sat beside me, as I was wondering...
    "So why love hurts?", I asked the dove,
    As it perched down on its alcove.

    And lo! It spoke to me as if
    it were a man with a whiter face!
    Its an olden tale, it said;
    older than your entire race:

    "It was a war the men had fought,
    for all the lust their greed had wrought.

    "And 'twas too late, for the love had died;
    in its solemn breath, it only cried:
    "Let there be me, in all of you.
    In all your hearts, be sewn into.
    For all the pain that you caused me,
    let me live inside of you."

    And on with its broken wing,
    lived the dove to tell the tale:
    "That once upon a time, lived the men,
    and lived the love amongst them.
    But still they fought, sparred to death;
    and it was crushed in the chasm beneath."

    "And why love hurts, so now you ask?
    Its trying to mend your undeserving heart.
    The love in you is only a fraction,
    and you feel the power of human attraction.

    "And for all the pain you once gave love,
    it only gave you a tiny frown.
    So you might know not to hurt someone,
    or else this love could take you down."
  2. rickkkyrich

    rickkkyrich Guest

    Good job.. great to see you back after a long time..
  3. susanthom

    susanthom New Member

    It try to figure out your poem and it needs time.
  4. horsesmouth

    horsesmouth Active Member

    @rikkyrich..yea dude..n thanks
    @susanthom..hmmm..but its quite simple...it just says not to hurt people...else you'll get hurt more...
  5. Good lines ... and dont say they are simple ...they are not ...!!
    i liked the way you imagine things .. this was like a fairy tale story written for small kids..( u tell a kid an elephant is driving a bus ..he will imagine and listen to what happens next) .. when we grow we understand elephants cant drive cars ... love is not real its a perception sort of it wont do anything, things around, ppl around do !!

    Anyways someting inside me likes the way u tell these stories and eagerly awaits ur posts ... so keep posting !!
  6. horsesmouth

    horsesmouth Active Member

    I really understood there's no such thing as a two-sided-love...love can be profound, immeasureable, but its never mutual,
    Someone, someday, will turn away.
  7. nandy0894

    nandy0894 New Member

    pain .... heart warming pain pretty much covers your poetry..
    well written ...
    but love can be two sided..acc. to me..
  8. horsesmouth

    horsesmouth Active Member

    Well, I dont deny it can't be, but all i've seen or experienced is just an acknowledgement of love, either out of sympathy, respect, or a feeling that i-dont-wana-hurt-her-by-saying-no ...and well, each of these happened to me..
  9. saleyad

    saleyad New Member


    Very heart touching lines. I really like these lines.

  10. horsesmouth

    horsesmouth Active Member

    Thanks dude!
  11. metalhead_junky

    metalhead_junky New Member

    good lines horsesmouth! you're really a great poet...

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