A stranger in the mirror

Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by nimisha, Jan 10, 2006.

  1. nimisha

    nimisha .:Forum Leader:.

    when i wrote in IGT.. someone asked me..why u write only on love.. there are many things to write.. so..thouh love is my favourite domain to write..im attempting in different arena of life for poetry... is this try amature or good enough..is upto u to decide..coz for me..my every writting is close to my heart..so this is too..!

    A Stranger In The MirroR.....

    dont look in the mirror when you cry..
    cause all you'll see is an unknown face captured in a wry..

    a stranger mocking at you..
    hollowness in his eyes bemusing you..
    trail left by the path of dried tears amusing you..

    and asking you one question again and again..
    why.. why.. and.. why.. do i deserve all this pain..

    small wrinkles at his forehead
    suggesting ripening of sorrows..
    desperate persue of something unknown..
    in a hope..if some happiness he could borrow..

    his limp thouhts..
    defeated soul..
    frustrated mind..

    bitterness in his face
    jitterness tightning its embrace..
    cursing the time..

    that stranger in the mirror freaks you out
    makes you frown more and more..
    makes you drown..
    takes you down more and more..

    leaving you nowhere.. just helplessness..
    countless regrets..
    endless worries..

    so i say.. dont look in the mirror when you cry..
    instead look into your innerself..
    someone known there, waiting for you to rediscover him..
    and give your life a second try..
    so dont look in the mirror when you cry..

    comments please..
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  2. ElysiaN

    ElysiaN d@Rk\/\/@|\|deReR

    :beer: a gr8 effort !!!!!!!!! but i guess there won't be too many people who look into the mirror when they cry.....even i never thought of looking into the mirror, if at all i cried... :)
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  3. nimisha

    nimisha .:Forum Leader:.

    dont judge the words only... it has some deep meaning in it.. let me explain..

    the concept of poem is.. dont look at mirror when you cry... means.. dont look at the present miserable state of yours.. (mirror just shows reflection, it can not catch ur innerself.. ) instead of crying over your miserability n helpnessness u should comeout of sorrows n give a confident person inside you take over all defeat n let u win again..

    i hope my poem carries this message effectively...
    n thanks for the comments..
  4. ElysiaN

    ElysiaN d@Rk\/\/@|\|deReR

    thanx for explainig...m not a gud reader or thinker.... :think:
  5. nimisha

    nimisha .:Forum Leader:.

    yes you are...
    btw..i like to have your comments everytime..
    words are wasted if a good reader like you can not decepher it..
    so plz keep your comments coming.. i may improve in my skills..
  6. CrYpTiC_angel

    CrYpTiC_angel Rebelle!

    i liked it :)

    good work!
  7. sixstringsin

    sixstringsin ||||||

    hmmm ... real good usage of words here to convey messages..
    -- its been great in either forms -- this style and the topori ishtyle!!
    Look fwd to more versatie writings -- they're refreshin to read!!
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  8. can_i_play

    can_i_play New Member

    "aaina mujh se meri pehli si soorat mannge...
    mere aapne mere hone ka " types....

    nice try....
  9. nimisha

    nimisha .:Forum Leader:.

    @cryptic angel :nw:
    @sixstringsin :nw:
    @can_i_play :nw:
  10. vishwa_81us

    vishwa_81us Banned

    Gr8 work Nimmo...

    i liked the idea.. Mirrors have been fav of all poets.. u expressed it beautifully.. and good use of words too.. ( but a bit difficult for me :eek:: to understand)
  11. #iR@


    good work! :) nicely expressed!
  12. vini

    vini Repeat Offender

    nicely written
    nicely expressed
    prominent rhyming ;)

    i like the depth of this poem which you substantiated beautifully with usage of apt words!!

    ..reps! :grin:
  13. Punnu

    Punnu New Member

    Nice poem Nimisha....u really use the words to get that nice ryhme going....keep it up
  14. nimisha

    nimisha .:Forum Leader:.

    gr8 to have ur comment everytime..
    keeps on generating creativity wit me... thanks

    yes..ur my apt friend to appreciate my silly attempts like that..

    just love you!!

    u r gr8 to notice n appreciate most of my work.. :nw:

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