A Romance

Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by horsesmouth, Aug 1, 2012.

  1. horsesmouth

    horsesmouth Active Member

    A birthday gift to my girlfriend. (For those about to say cheapo, it was followed by roses, a photo frame, and a greeting card on which it was written.) :p:

    O'er gentle breeze and clear skies,
    I wish for a chance upon the wind.
    Tonight, for you, if not be here,
    I'd let my thoughts dance upon the wind.

    I'd but wait for the dreary day to end,
    and for the night to glance upon the sill.
    With hazy visions my beady eyes beholden,
    I'd let my dreams dance upon the rill.
    O'er dawning rays and sylvan dew,
    the sylph and I shall continue
    the chant of the sacred slumberous night,
    the love of a pair pouring forth.

    Darts of Cupid they complain bedimmed,
    How much ardor a romance will contain?
    Between drops of amoroso and claps of thunder,
    I and you shall dance in the rain.

    ...and did she love it?
    YES !
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  2. Sucha mushy mushy piece ... doesn't sound good from a horses mouth ... imagine a horse singing it ..damm !!! .. u must consider changing ur name !!!
  3. horsesmouth

    horsesmouth Active Member

    ...to what?
    actually I was trying some old artistic expressions, twain-ish, though I'm nowhere close.. :D
  4. if at first you dont succeed .. try again :D
  5. nandy0894

    nandy0894 New Member

    oh wow..the girl must b floored..!
    such a cute thing this is :) <3
  6. horsesmouth

    horsesmouth Active Member

    hahha..sure I will, problem is many thoughts/ideas aren't coming by these days :D

    thanks ! took me a lot of time to structure it archaically! :)
  7. rickkkyrich

    rickkkyrich Guest

    Beautiful ... Reps added :)
  8. horsesmouth

    horsesmouth Active Member

    !thanks ! Double, for the reps !
  9. I am trying to get some harmless romance .. but others just want a name to every relationship :( ... its like we are going for brands even when deciding a relationship BAD too BAD
  10. horsesmouth

    horsesmouth Active Member

    haha well that depends on who are you trying the same with, and on your age, social, behavioral and 'other' compatibilities...
  11. i got it

    age religion behaviour other compatablities no bar :D .. now i will write some romantic stuff
  12. horsesmouth

    horsesmouth Active Member

    haha I bet...waiting for your post...
  13. metalhead_junky

    metalhead_junky New Member

    its so auld lang syne!
    loved the lines and the style both. you are an awesome poet horsey!
    the girl must have fallen so in love with you
  14. allstarsband

    allstarsband New Member

    superb!gives a literature feel..
  15. horsesmouth

    horsesmouth Active Member

    thanks dude
  16. horsesmouth

    horsesmouth Active Member

    thanks for your appreciation!

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