A Poem by My Brother...

Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by Garima, Dec 5, 2005.

  1. Garima

    Garima Born to rule <img src="images/smilies/rule.gif" bo

    Hey guys....this weekend i got to kno that even my Brother writes poem :) he shared this one with me...& i loved it....thot to share it with u guyz too...make sure that u post ur comments(good/bad) here aftr reading the poem coz i hv asked him to check the website whenevr he gets time :)

    Happy Reading....

    Ajkal wo humse baat karne se katrate hain
    Dil me kuchh ankahe se lafz simte se huye hain
    Jinhe hum aj bhi kehte huye sharmate hain
    Kehna mushkil ho jata hai
    Jab jazbaaton ke jhonke samajh ki lehron se takrate hain
    Umeed nahi hai phir bhi dua me haath uth jaate hain
    Manzar aisa hai ki intezar me haath bhi uthe uthe thak jaate hain
    Kya karein, kya kahein kuchh samajh nahi paate hain
    Bas ek lambi si saans leke ruk jaate hain
    Daaman zindgi ka chhoot te ja raha hai
    Waqt yu hi guzarta ja raha hai
    Kuchh kehna chahte hain par chup reh jaate hain
    Aakhir kab tak, kab tak ye zuban khamosh rahegi
    Is khamoshi ka dard sahegi
    Isliye aj hum ye keh jaate hain...
    ...Ki aj kal wo humse baat karne se katrate hain

    waiting for ur comments now........
     
  2. Petunia

    Petunia terminally dorky

    You know wht, garima..u tell ur bro thats one hlluva great peice! im not much of a urdu-person (urdu poetry and etc) and yet no enuf bout it to figure out thts its much hrder then english poetry and stuff. and this is some lit. :) not bad. :) and i love how he's takin it and summed it all back. in that one line...


    nice..real nice.
    keep it up!
    ~*~
     
  3. Garima

    Garima Born to rule <img src="images/smilies/rule.gif" bo

    ^^^thanx so much...he wud b reelly happy to read these comments :grin:
     
  4. shak

    shak Harrr!

    excelllleeeennntttt!!! garry .. be scared be very scared cuz now you have a bit of a competition .. and i guess ... i am growin more of a fan of your brother's than yours :p ... haha
    hey brother! very nice .. i am weak on urdu as well .. but i gotta give it to you ... *clap*
     
  5. Garima

    Garima Born to rule <img src="images/smilies/rule.gif" bo

    @Shak thanxxxx sooooo much.....i'll let him kno that he has a 'fan' now :)
     
  6. vini

    vini Repeat Offender

    nice one! :) reallly liked> "Umeed nahi hai phir bhi dua me haath uth jaate hain"

    ask ur bro to have a whack at english poetry too
     
  7. Garima

    Garima Born to rule <img src="images/smilies/rule.gif" bo

    sure vini....he writes once in a while..hez not regular @writing..
    same as i was before being a part of IGT...
     
  8. BubblyMartini

    BubblyMartini !!!HAWM

    All in da Family eh?;)

    Nice shayari girl...
     
  9. vishwa_81us

    vishwa_81us Banned


    That was an excellent demonstration of mature poetry... don't know much abt poetry.. but these lines touched me... the way he symbolised head n heart..

    cheers for ur bro :beer: wat is his name?



    vishwa :cool:
     
  10. Garima

    Garima Born to rule <img src="images/smilies/rule.gif" bo

    :grin: seems so....


    Thanx

    his name is Sunny....
     
  11. vishwa_81us

    vishwa_81us Banned


    O sunny paaji.. tusi kamaal ho.. btw is ur surname Deol :think:
     
  12. Garima

    Garima Born to rule <img src="images/smilies/rule.gif" bo

    ^^^no...its no filmi family :)
     

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