A life destroyed...

^Thank you very much.

 

Seeeee, I knew you could write! Its not bad : Kiddin bro, its great! Very well written. Dont stop writing. You really can. And I hope you remember our deal.

 

FINALLY, i get your feedback, this dude's been after me ever since we've met that i should write, and i finally did :grin: And yes you freakin coercion junkie, i remember our deal :

 

Wonderful, Bro!
I think U did try hard to choose the words. But are U sure this is ur first attempt?

 

^lol, very sure this is my first attempt, unless i have some habit of sleep-writing....thank you.

 

And now...after knwing the background its all the more amazing and emotive. I hope it all works out for you, Kazaapookuie

keep rocKing..

 

^Ah dear lord, you even got the spelling right :grin: Thaank you

 

LOL...had to look it up

 

^lol, so very kind of you..(I might just be the only person who spams my own thread....)

 

^^ na..been there done that!!!!

 

^lol..*shush* now, we'll communicate through PM's:

 

*A poem by d_ist_urb_ed :shock:*
*Reads it with eyes wide open*
*Realises...thats its high time to work on vocab:*
*think to get a dictionery*
*tooooo lazy to do that*

Sarat...i reaaaally need to check the dictionery....but as of now....welcome to the poetry forum buddy:grin: lemme check the dictionery & i'll get back....till then keep :rock:ing ....

 

^Heh, thank you:grin: Still waiting for your post-dictionary comments though :grin:

 

*bump* New faces, new comments!!

 

Ahem............:beer: to myself

 

holy jumping catfish batman!

 

^mwahaha : yayayayayaya, i want the $1000 so i can give it to south africa, pray for me

 

whoa! thats news!!

 

Interesting stuff Sarat! but i gotta say something....

hmmm.just like everyone else..I felt the need for a..Dictionary to understand wht's goin on..in this poem..

i think a poem should always be written in a language which the masses can understand. You will have to resist the temptation of using such language.

Moreover, this poem is an example of the problem english language is facing these days. Use of all the redundant phrases to substitue for our feelings tends to be easier, than coming up with new ones. Unfortunately we lose the real meaning of wht we were trying to say because those phrases were not created to convey those ideas.

Here's an article by George Orwell - Politics and English Language....Its a very well written essay...and a big time eye opener. I had to research this for my University essay, but it was worth every minute. This essay changed the way i look at articles, and other reading material.

This is a link to the essay...

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Politics_and_the_English_Language

btw all tht i wrote in this post might have some examples of the kind the kind of english i was trying to explain.... , its tough to get over the easy stuff....

one more thing...by all this it doesnt mean one shud stop working on their vocabulary. I think u have an excellent hold on ur vocab which is showcased in ur poetry and is commendable :beer:

waitin for ur next poem!!!

Hoping u win tht..best poetry award...and $1000 bucks too

Ankur

 

After watching so many threads closed for watever reasons....I wonder why this one is not closed yet.