A Gift, Godsend

Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by Sharmontime, Feb 7, 2006.

  1. Sharmontime

    Sharmontime New Member

    Now...this is the second poem of my friend which i promised to post earlier...
    You'll be amazed the way the poem is approached.
    I already did my bit of appreaciation.

    A Gift, Godsend

    It is a beautiful day,
    the sun is smiling away,
    the sky is clear and blue,
    the birds are singing loud and true.

    Surprisingly, my mind is sad,
    the entire day seems very bad,
    the sun looks reproachful, the sky empty,
    the birds seem to accuse me of being guilty.

    In this selfish world , there is a girl,
    in exchange her tears, I'd give her my whole.
    Mind like a diamond, a heart of gold,
    a deep remorse fills me, my heart can't hold.

    For I hurt a heart that cares for me the most,
    I steered my lifeboat away from its coast.
    My heart burns with shame,
    by hurting her, I gave myself pain.

    She is wounded, yet it is I who bleed,
    How ironic, how cruel is fate indeed.
    I wish she'd yell, I wish she'd fight,
    I wish she'd speak to me ...just once,
    and it would be alright.

    I wish she'd realise she's my sweetest friend,
    my advisor,my strength, my gift, my godsend. ​

    now that you have finished reading... its your turn to express yourself how do you feel.
  2. walk_alone

    walk_alone **~~| An Atheist |~~**

    A bit confused.

    Hey did u write it or ur friend did.....anyway poem is amazing.....reminds me of something.

  3. madhuresh

    madhuresh madhuresh

    wow first thing i learned a new word with such a godd sound .......GODSEND .......
    u know what i belive in ...AN ARTISTS HEART IS HIS HEAD....
    now what u lack is ...DePtH
  4. Sharmontime

    Sharmontime New Member

    @walk_alone : the poem is by my friend. btw, what did it remind you?

    @madhuresh : do you say ki "I" lack the depth or the one who penned this poem? please clarify.
  5. nimisha

    nimisha .:Forum Leader:.

    tell your friend... that this work was good....
    the rhyming scheme n expressions r very nice...
  6. madhuresh

    madhuresh madhuresh

    haan ok ....this ur friend... this word "godsend" saw this and forgot all other things u wrote ....jst poem and me.....this looosing sight of thins is so common these days ..i shouldnt say sorry 4 this right ?
    YA tell ur friend he lacks depth....
  7. vini

    vini Repeat Offender

    heaved a sigh of relief thinking this would be a poem on bright and happy note and the first stanza affirmed that but suddenly it went grey...technically speaking u took it towards the darker side very abruptly and subtly contradicted but that successfully depicts "the blue" state o mind.

    i'd say.. nice one! :)

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