Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics Forum' started by browneyegurlie, Jan 28, 2005.

  1. browneyegurlie

    browneyegurlie Sweet as Honey

    i bet ur guessing i dont name my poems
    but heres another one i did yester...yeh i sound unhappy in it but now i feel a lot better:)

    I’m bruised
    Aching in pain
    The blood oozing out,
    From my hollow arms.
    I cry these empty tears alone
    In the corner I sit, filthy and disgraced.
    Dark light covers me in shadow,
    Just a part of the background I become.
    The shattered glass lies beneath my feet,
    Scratching everything away.
    The starlight sways gently,
    Rocking the day to sleep.
    Yet leaving my eyes open to watch this scene.
  2. rizaaj

    rizaaj Forum Leader

    nice .. but y unnamed still.. think of a name and name it soon... it'll look much betta with a name... :D
  3. browneyegurlie

    browneyegurlie Sweet as Honey

    hahaha i shall think of a name....u got any suggestions?
  4. Sanjay Mazumder

    Sanjay Mazumder ~..::MASTERMIND::..~

    Really nice, browneygurlie. But I feel U should name it.
  5. rizaaj

    rizaaj Forum Leader

    wild guess for the name...

  6. browneyegurlie

    browneyegurlie Sweet as Honey

    ^liking it ...liking it a lot
  7. rizaaj

    rizaaj Forum Leader

    what?? the name???
  8. Sanjay Mazumder

    Sanjay Mazumder ~..::MASTERMIND::..~

    @browney, so, are U naming it now?
  9. jayswami

    jayswami Blue J

    the first poem was named Dead Fish.. this one can be named Damn I broke the mirror again... what am gonna do now?!
  10. browneyegurlie

    browneyegurlie Sweet as Honey

    hahhaa lol yeh i think everyday sounds pretty cool:) but if any1 has any other suggestions it always welcome:)
  11. bob-bobby

    bob-bobby Extinct or Banned!

    nice one , keep it without a name , would sound better ,... :)
  12. Asmodeus

    Asmodeus New Member

    yeah... mez agree with bobby there...
    amazing poem tho
  13. d_ist_urb_ed

    d_ist_urb_ed Genuflect b*tches!

    Nice poem browneyegurlie;)

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