Thanks for your comment..... i just wrote it to break my dormancy period... it have prolonged for quite a long time.... i think it did the work...
Here is a new poem I wrote yesterday... Tune jo pukara to.. Manzil se ghoom gayee.. Mand-mand purvayee.. Jiyra hilor gayee.. Nanhee se...
Posting after a long time..actually i think i posted something some days before but that was old stuff,here is something new.. how is it? :)...
Hey.. how is this.. i thing the first stanza is strong but i am not sure abt the others .... Ek shaam ho bheegi see… Aur yaad teri aaye.....
I think the thought process is good...but somehow the word selection and rhyming scheme make it too juvenile....the thought holds much scope...
Kyon… Kyon tumhari aankhon mein.. Aisi ajeeb veerani hai… Jaise bahaar ke mausam mein… Koi avaraa phool bevajah .. Kumhla gaya ho.. Kyon in...
Great lines....
Thanks guys...
Thanks guys... Monica... ur couplet is brilliant......
Thanks man...
Meri barbaadi ka saama ho chala hai, Ishq ab aur aasa ho chala hai. Kuch us shakhs ka jadoo hai ajab … Aur kuch ye dil bhi nadaa ho chala...
Bahut udaas lagta hai.. Yun hi dil ka dukh jaana, Yun hi khud ko samjhaana.. Yun hi har baat pe jhallana.. Din ka chupke se dhal jaana.....
Thanks everyone for encouraging me.special thanks to those who gave their time to read the poem and give their valuable suggestions.Thnk u guys..
Hey,I wrote this poem a couple of days ago...I dont know if it is good or what... but anyway,here it is.. Some make plans for everything.....
Pee kee lagan mein baavri, Baavree re… naina milae, naina churae.. khud ki hi chaya, se khud lajaae.. dhun hai ki kaise, pee ko rijhae.. saanvre...
nothing goin on these days... whassup guys...
Thanks..yes that ghazal is good...jagjeet singh has sung it very beautifully....I also liked the song....
thanks rickky..these days I am writing a lot of ghazals...I will try to post all of them here...
thanks horsey....
Hijran-separation aaseeb-a ghost,demon or spirit...
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