HI PPL! me back wid ASUSUAL ANOTHER poem... but this time its SOMETHING DIFFERENT PPL! i mean its something dat i personally liked... but OFFCOURSE ur comments r just wat i look fwd too! khair... heres something i rote after wat i have been through recently... and yea theres just A LOT of symbolism involved.... hope u guys like it... OH JUST A LITTLE THEME of the poem... its about a person working hard and making his way towards SUCCESS... its long but PLZZ DO READ AND COMMENT ON IT... here goes... --> SUCCESS! Standing on the foothills... Making 1 step at a time... I keep myself focused... Knowing dat theres no turning back! Escaping all the boulders dat mite crush me... Crush me into pieces dat may NEVER reunite! One wrong stepp could take me back to the start The start that I dont wanna go to... I carry ma trembling legs... Trying to keep focused! I see ma competitors pass by me... Wid a sneering smirk... Thinking wat I undertook was impossible... But I had to make it POSSIBLE! I carry maself; trying NOT to look down... I keep maself focused... Hoping wat I undertook is success The success I had dreamt for! I see the peak of this mountain... Which ONCE looked so far... But now its wat I have reached... I try to feel the heavenly breeze... keeping maself focused! NOW getting scrared of wat losing would be... Since victory had always seemed too far... I keep maself focused... And raise ma head wid dignity; for reaching wat I had THOUGHT was impossible! I make ma FINAL steps... And walk into a world... Which I wanted from the start... I look down where I came from... And OH! It was HARSH... Harsher than I THOUGHT I could bare! The world of success and pride... VICTORY is wat I have attained... I looked at wat awaited ahead.. And OH LORD! It was another start! I smile to maself... Standing on the foothills... Making 1 step at a time... I keep myself focused... Knowing dat theres no turning back! Escaping all the boulders dat mite crush me... Crush me into pieces dat may NEVER reunite! hope u guys liked it... COMMENTS ALWAYSSSSSSSSS WELCOMED! I DIDN:T REALIZE IT WAS DAT LONGGGGGGG! :| hehe
it might be a long poem ... but undoubtedly a worth-reading one ... i can relate to every part of the poem ... the insecurity towards the beginning, then trying hard to get the "IM" out of IMPOSSIBLE and after succeeding you find out that it's nothing but a new beginning !!! ... all these holds for me too ... great subject :rock: ... nicely written :nw: :nw: ... adding REPs if possible !!!
Good one...Liked it.... One should not stop at reaching a goal, instead keep moving towards much better one..right?? Great Poem...REPs added.
@ madhuresh... hmmmm... first reply was prettyyyy dissapointing! : try reading it if u get time! : @ paranoid... :nw: THXXXXXXX MAN!!!!!!!!! luved ur reply! just keep telling me how i have done and plzz just keep in mind that i am NOT here to hear wat i am good at BUT i need to know where i went rong! thx again man! ur reply made me smile! @ nimisha... THX SWEETY! @ sharmontime... THX FOR THE REPS AND THE APPRECIATION!!!!! :nw: totally agree wid u about looking at ur next goals and accomplishing them!
@Hira: Brace urself girl, its a bad post! First off, its title reminds me of Dexter's Laboratory! Secondly, thepoem was wayyy too long to endure. Didnt bother, as poems are not my kinda thing. And thirdly, I never saw a single guitar related thread, or even a post for that matter, from u. How come u are in a guitar site? But overall, i think u must be good as i cannot write so much stuff which also makes sense! Rock on.
Hey bro... ur chillin to it maan... but u gotta remember to KISS....Keep It Short and Sweet... Stringster Chillin out!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
@ paranoid... then i couldn;t ask for more! thxxxxx! @ bravo... hmmmmmmm... this is the SECOND time i have got an unreasonable response for u! if u wouldn;t have said the LAST FEW ARTICIAL LINES i swear i could have killed u! : anyway... thx for replying... about me NOT POSTING IN THE GUITAR THREADS... well its cause these days i don;t have time to play! if u would have joined IGT a yer back U WOULD HAVE FOUND ME POSTING! i appreciate ur reply SIR and yea U CAN SEE THAT I AM SURVIVING ON THESE FORUMS WIDOUT POSTING ON GUITAR THREADS ACCORDING TO U! well dats me man... u can;t do anythign about it! thx for teh reply!
errrrrrrr..... BRO? who were u talking to man? didn;t xactly get wat u mean : thx for reading though... :nw:
hira good try.... waht i thik abr these things is >Sab se aage bhagana hai to khud se tej bhaag... > its lonely at the top ... the verses cold have ben made a bit more compact but all in all solid poem..
your good and you know that writing something this kind comes easy to you but one request ..please dont use sms lingo.. it kinda spoils the mood and the feel of the poem and length is never a problem u know... as long as it doesnt get drab
Some come-back huh? Thanks for not killing me I cant remember the first unreasonable post to u though. Anyow, i'll watch out for ur bullets 4m now on. Well i dunno abt the past, maybe ur right. And since when IGT became a BATTLE OF SURVIVAL???? And true I cant do anything abt u NOT posting in th guitar threads, guess i'll have to beat it. Peace out.
^ urghhhhhhhhhhhhhh... :annoyed: ANYWAY... *deletes watever she rote* FORGET IT! thx for visiting ma thread though!
