this one.....quite close to my heart.... is dedicated to a dear friend.... \m/ I went to the doctor and he asked me: "Where's the sorrow and where's the pain?" "Look inside me and check me", I said; "must be, once where the happiness had lain." He peered inside the wisely brain, took his time to check it out. To find the shadows, ghosts ofThe past, that must, in my mind, be circling about. He tore open my pumping heart, and found clots of misery scattered around, "Must be painful, your heart is broken", he said; "at last, the reason, for your pain I found." He took his instruments of the violent kind, shut my heart and closed my mind; Took his time to get it done, then checked again, and he found none. Done with his scissors and prickly needles, he said: "There's no sorrow and there's no pain." "Is it? then it must be gone", I said; "for now I've found a dear friend".
oh superb.. i liked the third and last para....superbly done its serious but expressed in such a light manner... true words have so much power, and in your hands... u rock!
really good... n yes,...expressed in a beautiful manner.....not the usual friends r good poetry..... u've done it so beautifully!
@allstarsband @metalhead n @nandy..... oh......thanks u all........i dint xpect it to get such a good response.......lol
really nice one .. said waht it had to say types.... but still some how i feel these midiocre attemspts can be made reaaly artistic .... my be im wrong!!
I guess everyone starts with a couple of lines and then make their way through verses and paras to create a complete poem with a perfect start, great story and an ending with a message. A poem should be able to cimmunicate the story and let reader assiciate themselves with it. All said and done, this is a great story telling, very well put together.
i wanted to keep the humor alongwith the seriousness n the message.........so i dint try to make it heavy-duty @walkalone.....thanks man, getting this response frm u means the job was good...
:'( :'( :'( i feel pity on my fate....i cudnt giv anything to u :'( :'( :'( m a sinner but this sinner is giving blessings to an angel may u be always happy even if m dead i'm leaving
dun wry babes, it'll b over n allright soon...u've been a real angel btw the reason u can b bak here's tht u cant del ur IGT profile unlike other places.. mebbe sometime l8r..hope to cya again.. ciao, friend, n be happy wherevr you are :-h
